Form

Talk to me

titter, purse

click, or lick

blow a kiss

or anything

a pillow, bow,

a Pixar graphic

a cure, elixir

stopping traffic

Swole and sore

and chewed and bit

painted black

like sediment

spearmint breath or

Listerine

sour grape or

cinnamon

gusts of starboard

expectation

choppy driftwood

hesitation

Curling corner

 spiralled cypher

failing signal:

it's okay

it's not okay

maybe its okay

and I'm just not sure

or 

I don't feel anything

and this might help

hushed and lush

bent, suspended

a blank, a squiggle

doodle on a journal

somersaulting wave

a pirate's swallow,

casket aged

murmur, hiss, a hiccup,

tremble, SOS

Seabed creature

sentient and raw

space girl straggler

fueling up on

her dimensions

sleeping leopard seer

silent in intentions

Lock-ness with a locket

drunk on fumes of feeling

beached on me

A too-late beam

a lighthouse

in a sandbox

a mast

in a museum

a prototype,

a jigsaw grin

with so few pieces

that I go out looking

and won't come back

Reviews

[Debra White]

Hi :)
I really like this - so much going on - tiny little snapshots of thought - its like sensory overload.
Each read through I'm getting something more.... well done for engaging me entirely.
Kindest regards, Debra

[Thaddius]

thanks. I like layers. I'm glad you found a few of the secrets

[Alejandra Marie]

Wow. To be honest, I was kind of singing this poem in my head. It has a flawless rhythm that just captures you. Like when one is hypnotized, you can't look away until it's over. I also very much enjoyed the structure, you said a lot with very little words and every line tells me something more. I really like this.

[Thaddius]

thanks i appreciate that. i was actually kind of pissed at myself for not making the rhythm more perfect, it's a bit haphazard. it could be a kind of chant though. glad you respond to it

[Alejandra Marie]

But that's the beauty of music and after all, isn't poetry a lot like music? It is a bit haphazard. You're right. But that is the rhythm of this poem and it flows perfectly throughout. Not all music is seamless and consistent. Neither is poetry. It's a flawless rhythm that's a bit haphazard and I love it. It's what makes it unique. It keeps me mesmerized.

[~]

whoa!!! okay, you weren't kidding about not holding back.. i feel like i just read the cliff-notes on the book of lovemaking :D
intriguing, palpitating, seductive..

[Thaddius]

thanks in ten characters

[~]

smiling in twenty :D

[Wasekera S Chiphazi Ban..]

Good poem,Thanks for sharing-Love how you played with the words

[Thaddius]

thanks a lot