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Talk to me

titter, purse

click, or lick

blow a kiss

or anything

a pillow, bow,

a Pixar graphic

a cure, elixir

stopping traffic

Swole and sore

and chewed and bit

painted black

like sediment

spearmint breath or

Listerine

sour grape or

cinnamon

gusts of starboard

expectation

choppy driftwood

hesitation

Curling corner

 spiralled cypher

failing signal:

it's okay

it's not okay

maybe its okay

and I'm just not sure

or 

I don't feel anything

and this might help

hushed and lush

bent, suspended

a blank, a squiggle

doodle on a journal

somersaulting wave

a pirate's swallow,

casket aged

murmur, hiss, a hiccup,

tremble, SOS

Seabed creature

sentient and raw

space girl straggler

fueling up on

her dimensions

sleeping leopard seer

silent in intentions

Lock-ness with a locket

drunk on fumes of feeling

beached on me

A too-late beam

a lighthouse

in a sandbox

a mast

in a museum

a prototype,

a jigsaw grin

with so few pieces

that I go out looking

and won't come back

Reviews

[Bluefire]

It's like I Spy lol
No, I kind of got a dream vibe from this, like you witnessed impossibility and needed to get it off your mind and onto the page.
Well done!

[The Representative]

The fifth stanza stood out..


In our last exchange, Thaddius (or Graham) I informed you about my recent troubles - therefore needing therapy. I don't know whether the issues in my head were arbitrary, or if in fact my subconscious had done it purposefully, using torments as a pragmatic means to getting me to communicate myself to the outside world, but whatever the case, I've spent the past few months being busy..

I've put together a global list! Pairings, of people who will never talk to one another; anyone can be on it, from politicians, to oil rig workers. Sales assistants, to Middle Eastern soldiers. Film stars, to care home residents. Estate agents, to life insurance advertisers. School students, to conference attendees.. Anyone!

Both you, and Elisa Laura (another Writers Café user) are on this list.. I listed her with Thierry Henry, the French footballer, and I listed you with Angela Merkel (the German Chancellor).

When you read The Representative, last year, even I knew you'd read a world-changing text, I hadn't actually at that point possessed the drive to "change the world"; now I have!!

There's this list, of people who'll never talk to one another, and there's also other kinds of materials which I've produced that I'm intending to show to whoever I see next at the hospital.

[Thaddius]

sounds like a good use of the hospital - a captive audience haha. I appreciate the review. I'd like to prove you wrong about Angela Merkel. Maybe someday she'll be an X. And Elisa... that's funny. She's one of the people on here who sees a little deeper than a mind or a face or a set of fingers...

[The Representative]

Orchestrating a global standstill is the final aim.. At the same time, everyone on this planet stood still simultaneously, with their hand raised to the sun.

The list features around 100 pairings.. To name some more: Jon Schnepp (who features on AMC Movie Talk), and the British model Amy Childs; Jessica Wulff, and Lina Pujiyati; Cate Baum, and Quinton Jackson; Green Yu, and Karen Harley (RSPCA); Rodney de la Cruz, and Colin Bailey; Gita V Reddy (author), and Deborah Richter (featured in Van Damme's film Cyborg); Amanda Rutter (literary agent), and Michael Crompton (London construction worker); Ricardo Valencia (history teacher, in Santa Maria), and Kris Jenner ("the Kris Jenner"); Helen White (the one I had affection for, when I was a teenager - I imagine now she's a lawyer in London), and the girl who once toured Marian Koshland museum..

In all seriousness, Thaddius, it can make a person want to vomit; day after day, after day, after day, all these thousands and thousands of realities that can be true, but you just know will never be true.. Bill O'Reilly will keep having his Fox News soundings, but never once will he unconditionally talk to some person who's lonely in Romania; Kevin Feige, the head of Marvel Studios - year after year, he'll keep waiting month after month to have his moment on a platform, so he can unveil his next slate of Marvel films, but never once will he ask to talk to a Moses Akatugba (the man unjustly sentenced to death, in the Middle East), etc etc.

To change the world, to end the United States, and to end the UK - and all the rest of it - the human race has to "reference itself": take yourself, for instance.. You'll have existed as a 24 hour being for thousands and thousands of cycles, yet to the rest of the human race, if anything just 1% of that total existence will ever be known - and the same applies to the vast majority of everyone else.

People deserve a global standstill.. It may not get them their literal transcendence (by this, I mean some kind of literal metamorphosis), but what it will give them is "the event of all human history": Chinese culture, US employment ratings, national interest, British history, Sky news, New York Red Bulls v LA Galaxy, 50's America, European art, housing markets, the banking industry, the film awards season, presidential races, university courses, financial debt, outsourcing, social security, armies, manufacturing and modelling industries, hotels, psychiatric facilities, immigration systems, NASA, the Pentagon, the House of Commons, the Reichstag, the Kremlin, the culture in Texas, or in Warsaw or Dublin.. humanity's global standstill would forever demolish all this!!!

I can give humanity its standstill, but I now need to communicate in the flesh.. hence the importance, of this meeting at the hospital; watching Before Sunrise, last night, I enjoyed Jesse and Celine's talks, and experiences.. but it was also nowhere near the solution, to getting the rest of the human race to experience life like this!

Soldiers, or cadets in the Middle East.. refugees, in the Ukraine.. the unemployed, in the UK or the US or Canada or Germany.. Villagers, in Yemen or Kenya.. Football fans, in Liverpool.. People in Mexico.. People in Syria.. People in North Carolina.. I want all these 24 hour beings to have the identities that Jesse and Celine have.

(This past weekend, people worldwide went to see Jurassic World: before the end of this year, a percentage of these people will be dead, either because of homicides, or because of street riots or car or train or plane crashes.. I have the power to prevent all this!)

[Lexi Richard]

You use really great language and imagery. I really like this piece, it's a strong, but not too in-your-face kind of poem.

[Thaddius]

hahaha yea I'm not a big fan of the in your face types either. thanks a bunch Lexi

[W R Stowe]

Very indecisive yet sums up to a decisive end shaped as a monument or totem pole definitely unique

[Thaddius]

monument or totem pole, interesting thoughts... thanks a bunch

[W R Stowe]

you're welcome

[A. Fiorillo]

Very unique...nice piece! :)

[Thaddius]

Thank ye oh A. Fiorillo

[Passengerr]

Brilliant piece.. Amazing blend of desperation and perhaps hesitation..

[Thaddius]

thanks a lot. I'm glad you get that sense

[Confuser]

Thaddius: In the first stanza: my thoughts were cries for attention; visualizing someone wishing she/he would do anything; just give me a sign: Stopping traffic, thought a metaphor possibly stressing the importance, of that desire. ...like sediment, sounds as if pain, thinking of love, derived from first stanza: When you begin stanza 2, would it sound better w/o all the and's? Kind of stubbled; may just be me: The first thing that comes to my mind with all the tastes, spearmint, etc. would be hoping for her kiss; remembering the tastes...choppy driftwood hesitation, is that you or her/him, not sure...NOT clear to me...Curling corner...to the ending: just sounds like doubts, insecurities, anxiety, will she/he or not...the next stanza hushed, great rhymes, suppose another cry for help; it's so abtract, difficult for me...sleeping leopard, seems there's so much unpredictibility....when will she/he...what will happen? I loved fumes feelings beached on me...I go out looking and won't come back....humm: Thaddius: I have no doubt you're talented, but I must say, I am so sorry, it's interested, but I am NOT qualified to decipher this poem, and that's what I feel like. I do wish you would let me know what your intention was in this composition. I'm curious. Now, it is interesting. And please don't feel bad; I'm certain you could read some of my poems, and saw WHAT???, Anyway, thank you for asking me. Interesting, but very difficult for me. I'm not that smart and never will be. Dale

[Thaddius]

Who is qualified to decipher anything? I appreciate the view. I can't really say what it's about, but you're right, it is pretty abstract. It's a list of images and ideas that start with a woman's mouth.

Thank you

[Confuser]

You're welcome...sorry I couldn't do better. Dale

[Dark Rider]

This was really interesting. I don't normally read poems, but this one was a lot different than any of the few that I have read. I liked the unique flow you gave it, and the imagery you painted was amazing. Nicely done. :)

[Thaddius]

thanks very much for the kind words

[Dark Rider]

You're welcome.

[lovergirl]

hi !
thanks for asking me to read cause' truly it's a wonderful piece and i loved it (y) well done with rhyming i like it and it's a good use of words in every single way .
Ps: it's definitly going to be in my "library" as favorite ;)

[Thaddius]

aw thanks a bunch, lovergirl. that was fun to say

[Dez H.]

Wow that was the s**t. The way u used your words was like a punch to the gut with force. I like it and ima read some more of ur works. Good s**t.
-007

[Thaddius]

thanks Bond, much appreciated.