The Unwritten Poem

Have you noticed how the answer nests as questions 

flurry across a barnyard floor like white-hot stalks of hay?

You're so busy fighting fire that you step

across the pail. You kick the fumes up bending walls, the

licks of agony dashing for the

progenies of thought. A kitten

freezes on a beam, sniffing at an opening of sky; you

count, recount the melting windows, damning doors,

eyes enraptured by distractions and

cataract to exits.

 

Those ruins will become your home,

drinking raindrops from the saucer in the weeds,

splaying your broken back across a blackened beam

and rinsing scars with moonlight as a cat

wanders through your sleep.

 

That answer waits up there, or under the troughs

somewhere, I remember

as I drink in tractor radiation, leap, contort in

gasoline sonatas, bend, as flimsy as the walls that

used to house me, tremble

with the rooftop, dusted in infinities of ash that

you can't touch or sense or

sweep away, praise in beauty or in

danger, so

 

if you notice where the answer nestles,

then decompose into your 

elemental ash and 

rest your eyes. Allow yourself to burrow,

bask in unborn visions of the

barnyard never built, and the

verses, never written.

Reviews

[Justsimplyjulia]

wow, really a cutting edge vibrant poem. Filled with passion and gloom. I really enjoyed this peice, soooooooo going onto my fabvorites list. Keep up the fabulous work my friend.
-Dragon

[Thaddius]

Thank you so much my dear. I've been taking a break... so many other frontiers for me. Means a lot. Happy holidays

[Justsimplyjulia]

right back at you Thaddius

[Rossen]

Also good one for open mic night. Fast and strong lines lot's of middles and clean finish...
fun to read Thaddius 100/100

[Thaddius]

Thanks man! Appreciate your words as always

[Bluefire]

It's all in your mind, the barn and it's deterioration. The questions are the fire.
The verses never written are the verses long forgotten.
Everything stands for something in this strange little picturesque world you've created.
Well done. ^^

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Very intriguing, I love how your words wrap you up in descriptive visions and pull you through the entire scene... Such amazing word play that tangles my thoughts, I might need to keep this one to replay over and over again. Well done fine poet.

Btw the ending was superb!

[emma]

This is really good, I dont really understand the meaning but thats what makes it so unique! But congratulations!

[Elysa Kristen Lavelle]

Not bad~ but I don't really understand it though...

[Thaddius]

thanks. I'm glad you don't

[~VertoAtrum~]

It's definitely different.
Even though I don't understand what's being talked about, the images it creates are still very interesting.

[Thaddius]

thanks. I don't like to spell things out.

[AYVID]

I felt as if an Oracle was speaking to me. Wisdom so ancient from a poet so young. I am amazed at how deep you go into a scene, an occurence. You capture every nuance. Do you have wings to transport you so deep into it? That kitten freezing on the beam, sniffing at the open sky, oh my God!

The concluding verse brilliant!


"if you notice where the answer nestles,

then decompose into your

elemental ash and

rest your eyes. Allow yourself to burrow,

bask in unborn visions of the

barnyard never built, and the

verses, never written."


Indeed, we can never learn till we break ourselves down to our elements to ever really learn a thing. Thaddius, you did it once again!

[Thaddius]

I was trying to think of something humble to say, but F that: I AM THE ORACLE!!!!
haha seriously though, thanks for the support Divya

[AYVID]

You are right Thaddius. You don't have to. Just keep having a good time with your writing.

[Simran Kewlani]

"with the rooftop, dusted in infinities of ash that
you can't touch or sense or
sweep away, praise in beauty or in
danger, so"
I love this part. It's so thoughtful and amazing.
This is one of the finest poems I have ever read.
Keep it up, I love it. (: