A Shameless Poem

sometimes I lose my nerve, and other times...

I'm not festive or the shameless type.

I show up late to Christmas and let

wishes spoil on my tongue.

Crinkled, immature, this one

Follows me by moonlight on a 

Flat white acid trail.

I listen for the spooning pools 

of its heels and toes

but know no other proof

of where it goes.

Now

It's been a while 

since a rustle and

Electric panic strikes 

each muscle.

 

Yes, of course

The stalker is generic- but so is death!

And the distance of your words much worse

 

 

I wish

I was the one to track you down in

A marmalade hallucination, but it seems that

When Diana dips I

Lose the place of our Oasis, and pace

an endless silver circle where

Christmas never comes.

My wish

Rises up like winter's breath 

so I can't breathe, and as it leaves and I

crumple on my knees and ripple outwards 

in a theatric sigh, my

body freezes in a 

bow - my love! - to how I 

die

Author's Note

I wrote a poem on Valentines day... then I tinkered with it over and over..

Reviews

[moog-drika]

it has a dark feeling... the words and the essence of the poem is WOW!
I specially loved the last stanza...
Greatly penned... :)

[Thaddius]

thank you so much, darling

[ashley]

i love this… the meter and flow is perfect, and your imagery has quite the allure, too.

[Thaddius]

glad for it! thanks!

[Ren Grace]

It's a very dark poem, but that's what makes it simply amazing because you conjured it up through those feelings. The deepness gave off an eerie vibe and I enjoyed reading it. Your an amazing writer!

[Thaddius]

thanks for taking the time!

[Ren Grace]

You are very welcome :)

[Miss Marlette]

Just a great piece of writing.

[Thaddius]

appreciate it sir

[Miss Marlette]

Haha your welcome Maa’m

[AYVID N]

Marmalade hallucinations just made me catch my breath.!

[Thaddius]

stealing breath is a favorite pastime..

[AYVID N]

Hehehe. I can imagine.

[AYVID N]

I agree with Robbie about your nomadic yet totally interesting style. I really am impressed by the first read. This is just my first take on the poem. I'll be back with more in depth feedback soon.

[Ellyahnna Hall]

"The stalker is genetic-but so is death" Love love love it. Your writing is full of intrigue like chocolates filled with different flavors, each flavor uniquely it' own.

[Thaddius]

thank you, it's always been my goal to be the Forrest Gump of poets

[closed]

one can only marvel at such verse
my intuition reveals that you are amongst the greats

[Thaddius]

i congratulate you on a stellar set of intuition! all jokes aside, I really appreciate your larger than life review.

[closed]

lol np. you have a good sense of humor.

[TL Boehm]

my wish rises up like winter's breath - I crumple on my knees and ripple outwards...so many stellar lines in this piece. WOW.

[Thaddius]

thanks for this. I just started sharing my work - and wrote half of it last week - so it's an honor when such kindly words float across cyberspace and knock on my mind's black door..

[Meraki]

You're shameless in your love, a hopeless romantic maybe? I saw a garden it was nighttime and cold and anyways it was beautiful. You painted a picture with your words.

[Thaddius]

I'm certainly a hopeless romantic, emphasis on hopeless