Love at First Sight

     You look in my eyes

       I know it's love at first sight

        Please say that you're mine

Author's Note

Please let me know if you like it and if you would like me to write more! :)

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Though, basic in thought and emotion, the message of this Senryu is an old one; still, we romantics know that love never really grows old, eh? : )
With an apt title and spot-on counts, it should be free from capitals, and could use a more poetic/romantic voice throughout … for example, it could have been put in other than common prose talk, thusly:

in my eyes you look
at first site I know it's love
say softly you're mine

I normally do not do a full edit in a review, but this one of your original seemed so simple to do. I see a fine potential for you to become a masterful poet, with a deeper, more inclusive, and emotional sense of expression.
Thank you for sharing your craft, and for the opportunity to assist you with your skills! 〜 Richard

[GPR]

Thank you for the review :)

[Richard🖌]

Oh, sure thing.

[siddhi]

yup you may write more i wish to read

[GPR]

Thank you :)

[SCAMFEO]

It a good attempt...kindly write more

[GPR]

Thank you :)

[Elodie Thompson]

Your style of writing is very neat and collective. I can't wait to read more of your poems because they all contain a story.

[GPR]

Thank you :D

[Elodie Thompson]

No worries, it was a good read.

[Gee]

Can't write these,enjoyed reading yours,sweet

[GPR]

Thank you :)

[hyenatree]

Really cool, how short and blunt it is makes it more plaintive and moving :)

[GPR]

Thank you :)

[....................]

It starts with the eyes and ends in the heart... nice senryu!!!

[GPR]

Thank you :)

[mattavelli]

Great Senryu. :)
These are fun to write.

[GPR]

Thank you :D I love writing senryus too! They are by far my favorite form of poetry!

[mattavelli]

You'll get more comments on your short Poems too. Haha

[Perkele.7885]

I like this, very straight-forward and let's all hear more from you!

[GPR]

Thank you so much :D

[Jason Romoise]

You can write more. This one is short, but i think you can bring out an elaborate poem beautifully.

[GPR]

Thank you :D

[Jason Romoise]

You're welcome :)