I Pray

For kind of love i desire.!!!!!

I pray to God…
When I sleep it should be the arms of her.
I wake with my face in palms of her…
I pray to God…
May all happiness in the world she’ll get…
I promise never will I make her eyes wet…
I pray to God…
May I will take away all her her wrys,
And that her heart with joy always flies…
I pray to God…
If I'm the oyster, let her be my pearl,
And know I’lll always love the girl…
I pray to God…
This is my wish, may my love be true…
And I hope she never lies…
I pray to God…
And know, the day she lays me aside
That… that is the day love dies…

Author's Note

This was the First i wrote...!!

Reviews

[Rene Salinas]

Nice a prayer difficult to even review becuase as they are imbued by a devotion to your diety whichever that may be they transcend puntuation or grammar or and for ofjuggling technicalities for me. Just the fact that you might be humble enough to gather your thoughts and compose something along this lines if it indeed heartfelt deserves to be well received. Hope your prayer invokes the right frame of mind.

Thankyou

[Gozeta Ritesh]

thank u....for the worthy response...!!!

[Rene Salinas]

Pleasure. I enjoyed it!

[MomzillaNC]

Again, wonderful imagery.

Try this for form and edits:
I pray to God…
When I sleep it should be the arms of her.
I wake with my face in palms of her…
I pray to God…
May all happiness in the world she’ll get…
I promise never will I make her eyes wet…
I pray to God…
May I will take away all her her whys,
And that her heart with joy always flies…
I pray to God…
If I'm the oyster, let her be my pearl,
And know I’lll always love the girl…
I pray to God…
This is my wish, may my love be true…
And I hope she never lies…
I pray to God…
And know, the day she lays me aside
That… that is the day love dies…

[Gozeta Ritesh]

thank u...!!! seriously great..

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. I'm happy to help. And, remember, writers write, but great writers read more!