Melt

Melt

A Poem by Lily Legrand
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A poem I wrote sitting in my backyard, two years ago

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the two of us
lying in the sun
eyes closed
but still seeing 
the orange sunlight
through our lids

when we blink
and see each other
vague and beautiful
we'll reach for each other
and melt

© 2012 Lily Legrand


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It is always good to melt in love ...

Posted 12 Years Ago


Iwant to feelthat way,lol...i love it because it represent true passion..

Posted 12 Years Ago


Sweet, innocent and complex. pat

Posted 12 Years Ago


Such an amazing deep write, nicely done

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

So much power in those two last words. It made me think that there's more to these two people's story than what you let us know in this poem - real nice.
The rythm works very well too!

Posted 12 Years Ago


*roars* I suppose I should suggest, that this had a very fancy quality of allure and captivating style.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lily Legrand

12 Years Ago

Thanks! This is the best poem I've ever written, in my opinion :)
Eloha

12 Years Ago

Well it certainly shows promise of your abilities.
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This is amazing. I love the metaphors and imagery :) Great job, Aurelia.

Posted 12 Years Ago


It was short and sweet, which made it awe inspiring. I loved the attention to details when you said:

eyes closed
but still seeing
the orange sunlight
through our lids

I really loved that part, because I know the exact same feeling. Brilliantly written. I loved it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I really like the rhythm you have used, it's extremely effective and your poems don't need to rhyme with such a good use of tempo. I really like the simplicity of it, but the ending sounds very good. If you just read it out the end really closes it up and makes the poem sound finished. Awesome job!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on July 30, 2012
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Lily Legrand
Lily Legrand

Paris, France



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Aspiring model and writer. Loves to play folk-songs ob guitar, cook and travel more..

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