Crying,Dying but still trying

"Want him back"

Wantings are mine

Belongings are yours

But the time we spent

Is only for hours…

 

I loved those days

With you

That always crazed

 

I remembered those part

With you

That always blazed

 

I want to forget the past

The mistakes you made

And said, it was too fast

I want to forget that price

Which I have to pay

And will never arise

 

Why I'm not able to

Change those things

Which made me

Cry alone

Why I'm not able to

Praise those wings

Which made me

Fly swings

 

Crying for those days

When you loved me

Dying for those time

When you kissed me

Trying for those moments

When you pleased me…

 

And asking for your mistakes

Which you made me pay!!!!!!!

 

 

Author's Note

Just expressed whatever i was feeling when i wrote it....Just an expression in hardly 10 minutes.

Reviews

[JENY]

Wow…
Fantastic…..
Your play of words…
Accentuated….the beauty and pathos….in your linbes….
Wonderful…really wonderful..

[Senseless whatever]

Good write. A ot of emotion and longing in this. Very eloquent write. The flow and rhyming work well to guide the reader with feeling. There are maybe two spots that give a little hiccup due to grammar but an overall good job.

[Sarah J. Kelleher]

So much tension and sorrow, building up through the poem and finally exploding at the end. Well done expressing yourself, these are the best kinds of poems.

[Art Sun]

nice work on expressing your thoughts...

[Richard Williams]

Free expression and sincere emotion, sad and honest.

[Hopless]

i loved it manliy the 4th paragraph

[heich]

love the title as well as the words used.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good 10 minute poem. We learn too late what we had and still want. A poem with kind emotion and memories we need to hold on to. A sad ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Emilee Grimm]

I liked it alot. You can express yourself so easily it seems, without making the expression a complicated and confusing one. Nice choice of words. You always do so well in your poetry!!!

[Akshat♥]

this poem is good...rthym is also nicely done..full of emotions...wanting to correct the past...very nice:)