I will always love you……

You Complete Me

Whenever I thought of you,

I remember those lovely days spend with you…

Whenever I saw those places,

I remember those things mended with you…

Whenever I saw a broken star,

I remember those longings I made with you...

Whenever I think of love,

I remember those embracable times with you…

 

Now I know,

Things changes from the past to present,

Spendings had no longer been evident,

Mendings are no longer in existence,

Longings have dried from eyes like tears,

And embracement have made me into fears…

 

I hate the word of love,

I hate the part of dove…

 

I know that time has gone,

I should not think it along,

But I know this much is true,

That you went and

Made my life screw…

 

I needed you for all you thought,

I needed you for all you brought…

 

Now I don’t need those,

Which kept me away from yours…

 

I know you need me to forget,

But the memories I kept

Breaking me to "Death"…

 

I will track out everything,

But I'll only keep is your love,

The only thing I could say,

That "I loved you and will always do"...

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This was emotionally a very well written piece, very beautiful and touched my heart.
Literally, it can be improved. The grammar and the tense can be improved with a check.
But otherwise, this was a better and much well defined piece of writing. I can see your skills growing now as a writer.

[JENY]

Persistence..in love…
Irrespective of its ups and downs…
Makes love a divine thing…
Makes love a sacrifice….
Loved the poem so much….

[x]

another night time review...hope is what is called for...lol

What I'm getting here is a very sweet trust placed in another which seems to have somehow been broken. It's a heart breaking write really and leaves me quite sad. The only thing I know is that sometimes in the hurly burly of life, the innocent can be trampled in the rush and it happens without malice but that doesn't stop the hurt. How could anyone truly want to cause pain willingly to another....I'm going to go with simple misunderstanding here..great writing..

[ShaneBerry]

very sad rite, very strong.

[Art Sun]

Relationships are as complicated as the word love...and yet we keep moving forward to find of its essence...

nice...

[Richard Williams]

Emotionally genuine as the feelings come across sincerely. Yes change spend to spent and perhaps the last line, "That 'I loved you and always will." Good effort.

[Bubo]

Such a sad write, begins with all the promises of love, only to be hurt and disappointed.but still loving someone ........emotional writing.

I remember those lovely days spend with you (spent)

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime the past teaches us to appreciate the present and future. Your memory of love is strong in the story. I like the part trying to hold on to the good parts. That is wisdom. Can't allow disappointment to flog up the the good memories. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote