You loved me……

I felt that Love because of you

I feel that love inside me,

When you came close and hide me…

 

I pleasure those belongings,

For which I always longing…

 

I know you love that song,

Which I never sang along…

 

And now I'm crying,

That how I'm lying…

 

You broke me to pieces,

You woke me from dreams…

You held me close,

And you gave me those…

The love I never had,

The one I never said…

 

You loved me as much as you could do,

You loved me as much as true,

 

Now I know,

You loved me through your heart,

You let me to be your part…

 

Author's Note

I wrote this when i was imagining my life with my love, who is still in my imagination. And will always be.....!!!!

Reviews

[JENY]

Learning dynamics of love is a cardinal and unavoidable phase in the life of a human being…
Nice poem…
Please read my poem FIRST LOVE LESSON…

[Diren]

oh, i most definitely knows how this feels. argh, such a frustration. fix it up a little bit, with a little polishing and you'll have a sparkling gem of a piece. good work, bbydoll. yea. ♥

[heich]

I know you love that song,

Which I never sang along…

i love these lines..it speaks for itself..

[Richard Williams]

A good poetic effort writing from the heart and soul. A little tweaking here and there, like "I'm always longing". Keep at it.

[ShaneBerry]

no it wont always be in ur imagination, just wait ull find someone

[TAO]

Ah, don't give up hope so easily; my love is in my head...for now. I think I will meet her, hope I will....

I'm certain of this... Correct me if I am wrong, but is English not your first language? I get that impression through your poetry. If that's the case, I shall not judge the words you use, but only the feeling they evoke... I feel as if your hope is strong, and thus, reading this, mine is strengthened. It's nice to know that I am not the only one with a dream I'm in love with. I like the emotion of it, the rawness of it very much. Keep writing your heart, Ms. Lavina. Well done.

[FlawedByDesign]

I can say I partly sympathize and know where you're coming from seeing how I wrote a lot to my imaginary girl/wife to be; it's nice in that respect.

There are a few disconnects and mistakes such as,
"And you gave me those…" - what are "those? - and,
"For which I always longing…" - I think it's supposed to be, "I'm always longing..." - and I think you're missing a "To" at the start of, "Which I never sang along…"

Good effort.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the description of love and the emotion in your words. You are correct. Love is a safety of two instead of walking alone. I like the feelings and desires described in your words. You create a beautiful poem of love possibility.
coyote