I'M DYING………

I dying to see you the way you were,

I dying to love you the way you want,

I m dying inside my whole to care for you,

I m dying to piece of my heart that is carried away by you,

I m dying solely because you are not here,

I  m dying to hear those love you, you used to say,

I m dying to say every beat of my heart,

I m dying to announce that you are mine,

I m dying just to know that you wanted to come back,

I m dying you to come and say that I NEED YOU BACK,

I M DYING BECAUSE MY SOUL IS EMPTY WITHOUT YOUR SOUL BEING IN IT……….

Author's Note

My first written poem......

Reviews

[Bhavya Kaushik]

I loved the concept of how you emphasized the concept for how you are dying and came to a conclusion in the end that you are dying because your soul is empty without his soul in it, loved the concept..
The concept is very powerful, but you can improve the lyrical and poetic quality of this piece by writing it in structure and giving it a better rhyme scheme. But, overall I loved it :) Welcome to writersafe :)

[lavina k.]

thanks bhavya.......:)
i know i need to improve alot.....:)