A Vial Of Blood

A vial of blood a year,

To keep the doctor away,

Drink it like beer,

And I will stay.

 

Every month a drop of blood,

To satisfy the urge,

It isn't the flood,

That could be purged.

 

A taste of blood a day,

Will keep me strong,

So I won't have to slay,

So it's not so wrong.

Reviews

[Morrigan Nicole]

Never been much of a vampire fan, but it was nice work.

hehe vampire. nice

[JJ_love]

oooo vampiristic haha love it

[sentimental~ galore]

Actually i have a habit of doing the comma thing also and honestly that just proves that you have a sense of when there is suppose to be a transition to a new thought so don't worry about it too much. Your content in this poem was especially passionate...i liked the longing and the intensity you captivated in this piece. Even If we're not all blood drinker its easy to relate to such a magnified desire. You have a beautiful skill of wrapping your emotions into simple yet meaningful poetry. I am so proud of you...i enjoy the idea that you write based upon when you are most passionate about things. It makes your writing that much more powerful. Well done. :)

[Jessi Berlasty]

An interesting poem. but you don't need commas after every line. In reality, they are just sentences, so you need to stick to the grammatical rules of sentences.

[DearSweetAgony]

Wow I love the whole want.....no..NEED for blood
in this interesting write.I love the last verse in particularly.
Beautifully Executed!
Great Job!

[Jill Wallflower]

I like the concept of this poem. Actually, I just like this poem.