49.Child is divine
A Poem by pal
 Haiku, one more 
Child in all a truth
Human symbol of divinity
Sets souls free
pal
© 2008 pal
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I am thankful to My friend Siddartha Beth Pierce for her constructive comments.
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As a mother I can truly empathize and relate to the truth of this haiku. One suggestion is that I would use a different word in the end of the second line and end the third with divine rather than using the word divine twice. I think that would make this even stronger than it already is. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Love and Light,
Siddartha
Posted 16 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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My first read of yours and I did enjoy it...
Looks like you made the recommended suggestion..
So it reads better..and makes the Haiku stronger.
Very nice,
Lisa, now in Spain
Posted 2 Years Ago
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As a mother I can truly empathize and relate to the truth of this haiku. One suggestion is that I would use a different word in the end of the second line and end the third with divine rather than using the word divine twice. I think that would make this even stronger than it already is. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Love and Light,
Siddartha
Posted 16 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Added on July 8, 2008
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palsofia, Bulgaria
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PAL:
That's me, a friend. Socially and mentally matured. A person with positive attitude and take one thing at a time. Neither look back nor worry on future. Prefer meaningful talk with others .. more..
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