45.My big brother

45.My big brother

A Poem by pal
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Breaks the tender hearts; Rips-in rage-things apart, Odd one out, he is, 'Think not', he prefers.

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My Big Brother

 

 

M y big brother

 

 

Y ells and casts his spells

 

 

B ullies the younger ones and always

 

I ndiffierent to feelings of others in the family

 

G reat and good, he feels

 

 

B reaks the tender hearts

 

R ips, in rage, things apart

 

O dd one out, he is

 

T hink not, he fears

 

H igher to himself, none he cares

 

E go is all, he preserves

 

R epells all, yet remains mother's pet

 

 

Pal

 

 

 

 

© 2008 pal


Author's Note

pal
Acrostic, my first one

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Pj
Wow! So much hatred, but in a seemingly playful way due to the colours...the contrast was baffling, but in a great way. It made me read through the poem again to find the messages...that beneath the image you see, there is yet another image of him...maybe jealousy overrides reason? I Like this very much!

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Yo how'd you know all this it's like you took a page from the Good Book. It is Cain or Able right? Anyways this is dope.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Pj
Wow! So much hatred, but in a seemingly playful way due to the colours...the contrast was baffling, but in a great way. It made me read through the poem again to find the messages...that beneath the image you see, there is yet another image of him...maybe jealousy overrides reason? I Like this very much!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

finally an artful acrostic! a lot of resentment towards your brother here, but seemingly rightfully so with all his tantrums and haughtiness!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I never wrote an acrostic, so I think this one is really good, though it is sad, but unfortunately it happens very often. Made me think of the movie with James Dean "East of Eden".

Well done.

Posted 16 Years Ago


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wow... this is quite profound! Excellent, albiet heartbreaking write.. Hugs to you!

Posted 16 Years Ago


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