41.Ugly one

Poem n video by Pal. Ugly types are typical; Some pretend sophisticated; Others crude, present as they are; He was crude, to the core; Hissing like snake; Spitting venom all over; Showing visual signs of; Intellectual arrogance

 

Ugly one

 

Cherish the moment

Entering ‘Writers Club’

Read a poem, ‘Love’

Author, a friend of mine

 

Greatly impressed

Read many more

Poems, stories

Writers of all kinds

 

Hesitantly I stayed on

Scribbling, expressing

Thanks for all my friends

Their encouraging reviews

 

 I had my idol, poet

A great one, “Karen”

His writings, I adored

Dreamt, being like him

 

Of late, I notice

Writers are restless

Hurrying, to catch up

Reaching some peaks!

 

A rat race like, writings

When flowing machine like

To get those medals

Be on top, the chosen ones

 

Something went wrong

I saw my idol’s ugly face

Naked n unmasked

He had shot out message

 

“…They just want to post

A half a*s poem

And have other half

A*s poets complement them on…”

 

It was crude n rude shock

Watching my idol shattered

How could I have misjudged!

Him being wise, who isn’t even human!

 

Ugly types are typical

Some pretend sophisticated

Others crude, present as they are

He was crude, to the core

Hissing like snake

Spitting venom all over

Showing visual signs of

Intellectual arrogance

 

Survival of fittest

 That’s law of jungle

Don’t nudge n bully

Humans all we are

 

Blessed you are

Don’t be petty

Don’t fritter away

Life is too precious

 

Pal

Poem n video by pal

46.Ugly one

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZbOsH0mB1hs

 

Poem by Pal. Translation by Maya  bogdanova n video by Kamelia, Bulgaria

61.Ugly one-(Грозен)-Bulgarski

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=P-lT01zwO3E

 

Author's Note

I wrote this.. the last writing before all havoc hit writers club..
Ugly ones are every where..now all members seen it in real..lol

Reviews

[James Watts]

Yes, I agree. I had some ugly comments made on my work. But I have twice that many in good reviews...just take the bad with the good. Can't please everyone. Some are jealous and some just plain mean, but don't let it get you down. For one I like your work and I know there are others that feel the same.

[smiggle wiggle]

wow. i really like this. great job!

[TL Boehm]

coming back for a second try on this. I hope we aren't having more glitches. I am about glitched out.

[TL Boehm]

wow. true colors - true nature comes out in the face of catastrophe. People either rise to the occasion or they fall hard.
Smart writing here. I hope you are rebuilding your page. Thank you for staying. I've seen a few go already and it saddens me. peace.
I'm not sure what is going on with slider bar for ratings but the site won't let me slide you over for a 100. That is what I want to give you...so I will try later and see if its just a quirk.

[Vanessa Whiteley]

Did you mean to have the tenth and eleventh stanza's joined as this seems to break your structure? I like the alternating purple and green.

[SM Davis]

A rat race like, writings
When flowing machine like
To get those medals
Be on top, the chosen ones

It is still like this even after the catastrophe. I have found that the camaraderie that I hoped would come has not. It is still the race to the top instead of taking a back seat to comfort and love. It's very sad actually. This was very well done.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Some great points made, I've gotten a few nasty comments on my writes as well.


Great Write.
Rayne

[George Love]

Many excellent points. Well done

[Touché Armada]

Sigh, I have read so very many of these rebuttal type pieces and generaly dont comment, though in this case I will, mainly because it is clever.. But with all the havoc I was really hoping people would concider what they were reposting.. But then I guess we are all judgemental at times, human nature.

Peace and happy wirting to you.