39.Fail to click

Poem n video by pal. A young one; Tender, soft n pure; Always, look up; For support, others' lead; Being the youngest; I was ready to oblige; In fact waiting, willing; Seeking, an opportunity.

 

Fail to click

 

A young one

Tender, soft n pure

Always, look up

For support, others’ lead

 

I remember even now

It was dawn, Just about

Elder brother yelling

Hey! Come on over

 

Being the youngest

I was ready to oblige

In fact waiting, willing

Seeking, an opportunity

 

He was double my age

I had just crossed 6

“Hey! Look here!”

It was a quarter $

Offering me a deal

A reward “6 pence”

Prove smart, to trick

Some one, with the quarter

 

Take this quarter

Walk over to the shop

Make a small buy

Few pence, Peanuts!

 

He warned me

Be careful, don’t mess up!

Keep the quarter

Crown’s face top up

 

I ran over

Bought with pleasure

My little dream eat

The lady returned change

 

Something wrong!

The lady was furious

Yelling n abusive

I was frightened

 

Taking back nuts n change

Reprimanding me, she yelled

Go away, don’t ever

Dare this again!!

 

I never heard what she said

Forced her return my quarter

Else, my brother sure would

Beat me up, for a bad job done

 

Later, I learnt

What went wrong!

Why the deal

Fail to click!

 

What my brother gave

Wasn’t a quarter

In fact a pence

Concealed inside silver foil

 

Well rubbed n polished

The Crown head looked

Like a real quarter

With all glow silver

 

P A L

Poem n Video by Pal

40.Fail to click

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=X68UlDRqB-w

 

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

what a mean ole brother. This has a nice story telling quality to it, although I hope you got one up on your brother at some point if this is a slice of history and not fiction. I am an only child so I don't always "Get" sibling rivalry - but my own boys...wow....they are ROTTEN to each other one minute and sharing PC games the next. Peace. great poem.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Well written, great flow. Nicely done.


Great Write,
Rayne

[Ken Simm.]

All fallen for something similar. Nice cosy read. I liked it.

[George Love]

Interesting take on an old trick! Well done!