39.Fail to click

Poem n video by pal. A young one; Tender, soft n pure; Always, look up; For support, others' lead; Being the youngest; I was ready to oblige; In fact waiting, willing; Seeking, an opportunity.

 

Fail to click

 

A young one

Tender, soft n pure

Always, look up

For support, others’ lead

 

I remember even now

It was dawn, Just about

Elder brother yelling

Hey! Come on over

 

Being the youngest

I was ready to oblige

In fact waiting, willing

Seeking, an opportunity

 

He was double my age

I had just crossed 6

“Hey! Look here!”

It was a quarter $

Offering me a deal

A reward “6 pence”

Prove smart, to trick

Some one, with the quarter

 

Take this quarter

Walk over to the shop

Make a small buy

Few pence, Peanuts!

 

He warned me

Be careful, don’t mess up!

Keep the quarter

Crown’s face top up

 

I ran over

Bought with pleasure

My little dream eat

The lady returned change

 

Something wrong!

The lady was furious

Yelling n abusive

I was frightened

 

Taking back nuts n change

Reprimanding me, she yelled

Go away, don’t ever

Dare this again!!

 

I never heard what she said

Forced her return my quarter

Else, my brother sure would

Beat me up, for a bad job done

 

Later, I learnt

What went wrong!

Why the deal

Fail to click!

 

What my brother gave

Wasn’t a quarter

In fact a pence

Concealed inside silver foil

 

Well rubbed n polished

The Crown head looked

Like a real quarter

With all glow silver

 

P A L

Poem n Video by Pal

40.Fail to click

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=X68UlDRqB-w

 

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

what a mean ole brother. This has a nice story telling quality to it, although I hope you got one up on your brother at some point if this is a slice of history and not fiction. I am an only child so I don't always "Get" sibling rivalry - but my own boys...wow....they are ROTTEN to each other one minute and sharing PC games the next. Peace. great poem.

[ABBY]

haha that was a really funny poem. it made my mom laugh when i shode it to her

[Susan M]

This is sweet. And how typical for the older brother to lead the younger brother into trouble!

[Peaches]

Thank you, this was enjoyable to read.

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

This is a classic case of get Mikey to do it. Nicely done.
Debby

[Gandré]

You told us a story within a poem. I enjoyed the design with colors. A good write, dear friend! I enjoyed.

[PoemRodent]

This was quite unique and captured my attention all the way thru very well done.

Dostani

[Dead Angel]

well that was mean of your brother to do. i liked this story, i saw everything unveil in my head as i read on. very creative and very well written. good job! :)

[Jenny Davis]

Pal, I really liked this story! It was told so well, I watched the video...and with the music and images, I found myself snickering at what a trick your brother pulled on you! Excellent stuff, my friend! :)

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

What a tricky fellow - the things siblings do to one another...my sister and I had such moments. An interesting tale told well. Succinct and well written. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha