Remember

Remember that night a few years ago?
I'm sure you do.

Remember how it started out so nicely? 
Sitting, talking.
Peace?

Remember how it turned out so badly? 
Fleeing, crying, screaming? 

Remember how you promised never to hurt me again? 
How you were begging on your knees? 

Notice how that night replays itself over and over,
always ending with you begging for forgiveness?
Promising that it won't happen again? 

Do you feel guilty,
when you see the bruises on my arm? 

Do you feel guilty,
when you hear the lies I tell?

The excuses I make,
like why I can't go swimming,
why I never wear t-shirts? 
If you do, why do you keep hurting me?

Why does the night always turn bad?
Why does it end with me cowering in a corner? 

I just want to know, 
to understand. 

Why do you  this to me? 
Does it give you a feeling of power? 
Make you feel better? 

Why do you do it?
 I don't understand. 

Do you like to see the fear in my eyes? 
Do you like how I creep around when you're near, 
trying not to make you angry? 

If you do, 
why do you say you're sorry afterwords? 

To make it hurt even more the next time? 
To grind the betrayal further into my bones, my skin, my body, my mind. 

You say you're sorry but you're not.
If you were,
you would stop. 

Author's Note

What do you think? Anything I could change/improve? Does the title fit? Anything in specific you like or dislike?

Reviews

[Rahul]

I think this's a great write and this's about
love,
pain,
hurt,
truth,
lie,
feelings,
heels,
zeals,
and moreover this piece is all about "semblance" that's what i think.

No, there's no need to change anything else in this piece because every line's well penned with your hand but came from your heart not from your mind and try not to change. I liked this piece because i can feel your pain, love and appearance of love.
No, i don't think there's need to do improve this piece...leave it as it is..it's painful and truthful with your feelings.

Yeah, i liked everything special...
Do you like to see the fear in my eyes?
Do you like how I creep around when you're near,
trying not to make you angry?

If you do,
why do you say you're sorry afterwords?

this phrase i loved because i've seen here realness' not even of your life but it's of everything's life...in everyone;s life this happens to all one's once a time foresure...tht's what i liked because it's real and having a lot of pain, depth, joy but sorrow as well...!

i was trying to figure what a thing is here that i disliked....so i read it twice a time but i don't think here's anything else what i didn't like and love and i did dislike...i liked everything and i loved this piece because it's came from your heart.

Rating :
1000/100

conclusion :-
Awesome write but painful write.
great job, keep writings...you've already got my thumbs up not one or not two it's 100 thums up you've got from me. !

[Isabelle Faye]

Thank you so much! Your comment means a lot to me!

[Speak in Silence]

As I always say, I love this lol and good luck once again :)

[Isabelle Faye]

Thank you

[Speak in Silence]

I love this, good luck :)

[Persona]

Mmm, I like it! I'll give it 97, but not 100 because "remember" is repeated a lot and that kind of halts the storyline to the poem. Otherwise, I like that it's straight forward, and that I can understand the beating by a partner. I like the way it sounds in my head and it's got a calm anger and sadness to it all at once, a vulnerability.

[Speak in Silence]

this is so powerful, good luck :)

[Isabelle Faye]

Thank you...

[Speak in Silence]

you're welcome :)

[Woja]

This is a heartfelt piece

[Isabelle Faye]

Thank you

[Serenity Faith]

WoW. A Power packed piece. Sad to say, I can relate, but I don't let stuff like that keep me down. It's past stuff anyways, no need to dwell, though sometimes the memories resurface...I certainly hope this is a fictional piece, but if not...you're not alone darlin. Things tend to get better over time, you just gotta be tough. As far as your poetry goes, written well, rolls off the tongue, and causes a strong reaction. 100/100

[Isabelle Faye]

Thank you. Time heals most wounds...most. I'm glad you like it, it was originally a prose piece but I thought it would work better as a poem so I changed a few things and seperated it into stanzas.

[Michaela]

Sweetheart I just hope this isn't true, because you deserve to be safe in a relationship. This was touching, and amazingly written. It tugs at my heartstrings, because my aunt went through the same thing. Wow, that was beautifully awful

[Isabelle Faye]

Thank you very much.

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I really loved this, i can feel this one tug..so nicely written