Falling in Love

A short poem I wrote a while back.

Some people stare,

look at the sky.
Fantasize about the perfect guy.

Others sit,
stare at the ground.
Wait for someone to come around.

Still more wait,
waiting to care.
Waiting for someone loving and fair.

There are few,
a quiet few.
Who think that love is only for you.

And then there is you,
completely yourself.
Who are you outside your shell?

Reviews

[The Empty Hour Glass]

Quite a wonderful piece of work, though I couldn't help but notice a couple little mistakes; The first line of your second stanza - You meant for 'Other' to be 'Others', didn't you? And again in the first line of your last stanza - 'Any' was intended to be 'And'? You did an great job capturing the truth in this situation - that being what the title clearly states. I think you can do better nonetheless, as no one is ever at their peak of perfection. Use the extra space you can find to draw inspiration and work hard to make your work amazing and not just great! I hope not to offend or deter you from writing more - my aim is to give you an opinion you can learn from*

[Legolas]

Wow. The poem creates a unique atmosphere. I find the poem very sweet:)

[Wild Willow Blue]

The simplicity makes it pleasing to read. Well done.