Getaway

My face

turned up

towards the

warming rays

of the

yellow sun

 

Wind whistling

All through

my ears

whipping my

hair everywhere

 

My eyes

on the

heavens opening

above me

 

Back and

forth again

causing shrieks

of delight

 

I fly

through the

freedom that

is swinging

 

Problems melt

away like

snow on

a warm

spring day

 

Swinging is

the best

close by

getaway

 

Author's Note

Sometimes I wish that people who get addicted to things, like my friend, could just do something innocent that they haven't done in awhile, like swinging, and just get addicted to that instead. That's where this poem comes from. Sorry for the longness.

Reviews

[Joshy1128]

It is absolutely, as you say, fantabulous! It has a good topic, lots of meaning... and usually this is rare for me to see a poem set up like this (the way the lines are put, 2-4 words per line) and it works with something like this... but maybe change that. Still awesome though thank you for letting me read it! I give it a 95

[A.E. Surdam]

That was sooo awesome! It reminded me of a mixture of spring and summer. >< Oooh can't wait for it to come. Very beautiful and I love the way you used your word choices and how to brought together the poem. It has a very nice flow. Good job.

[Kelly M.]

I LOVE THIS!!! One of my ultimate favorites of yours! The lines, "Problems melt away like snow on a warm spring day." Being out in God's beautiful world makes you forget your problems for that one sweet, magical moment! I just love this!! :)