Wait

Inspired by just a thought in the halls of a club.

lost in the crowds waving their bodies in the flow of the bass

hitting me where my heart used to be

slip away, only to be caught once more in the wave

crashing bodies into crashing highs

wait

wait

wait

here comes the final drop before the lights ruin the world created

bringing us back to the reality we escaped 

tingling sensations lost and set free into the night

wait.

Reviews

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I know this feeling.......used to have it every weekend in my clubbing days. When you all you want to do is feel the beat, flow with the beat and leave all reality out on the street!

The repetition of your title throughout is an interesting move; it emphasises your theme without becoming overly monotonous, a delicate edge to balance on in poetry. You balanced it quite well here. Points for that!

Overall, an interesting write. Unique and universal at the same time.

[Ms. Twitch]

Thank you Doodley, I always appreciate any comments and feedback you have on my poetry. This was my first with shorter works, and I'm happy the theme still came through.

I'm not at all into clubs, much rather go to a reggae show but it was an interesting night and enough to inspire this while there. That night, the beat definitely inspired.

Thank you again, cheers to your writing!

[anne elizabeth]

I enjoyed this a lot, it feels organic and not over produced.

[Ms. Twitch]

Thank you for reading and your kind words..cheers! Good vibes to your writing

[Adam Adams]

this's very symphonic. very artistic & professional.
much depth of reality & its hypnotic hearts' be hidden behind your deep words. love sets us free but it also pin us down downside of life. quite magnificent!

[Ms. Twitch]

Thank you, I very much appreciate the kind words. I very much agree, love is one of the strongest to feel and can both set up free or drown us.. good vibes to your writing!