Do you see me here?

this is about my bf and how i felt with him.............. enjoy :)

Do you here me when i sing are love song for everyone in sight?

 

Do you here me when when i call your name at night?

 

Do you here me when i scream in fright?

 

Do you even hear me at all, or are you look for that other girl?............................

 

 

Author's Note

yes viwers i no it stinks.

Reviews

[paradise]

this does not "stink" this is actually rele good i like it

This poem does not "stink"! I really like where this poem is going. One pointer I received today from my poetry professor was that using question marks in poetry tends to create confusion and takes away from the poem. When writing poetry, be blunt! It doesn't matter what others think.

[Tree Bark]

aw i like it, it's sad but lovely how you felt about him :)