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A Poem by Sam
lovelorn girl, i am counting the days and keeping time on my rib cage in rhythm with the sickness of my viscera these bird bones have never left me light enough to take flight-if i were vomiting sustenance instead of {pretty words} maybe i could walk on glass or greet the morning sun like Icarus instead of wrapping my intestines around my n / e / c / k because Isadora didn't feel like sharing her scarf.
© 2019 Sam
Author's Note
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feedback is appreciated!!
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Featured Review
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Increadibly gripping, such a unique style with amazing results. I feel a build up in this peice and it doesnt let you down. somehow your words carry on more presence the shaper and shorter they become. A very dark and poignant peice, thank you for sharing.
Posted 5 Years Ago
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5 Years Ago
thank-you so much!! i honestly wasn't expecting anyone to notice this poem so the fact that you had .. read morethank-you so much!! i honestly wasn't expecting anyone to notice this poem so the fact that you had such nice and helpful things to say about it really made my night!! this really encouraged me to try writing some more in this style-i wasn't sure if it was too abstract or just didn't work? but thank-you for your feedback!! i wrote this poem on a whim so it means a lot that it meant something to you
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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5 Years Ago
thank-you so much, my goodness!! i'm so happy
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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5 Years Ago
thank-you so much! i'm glad that the meaning was clear and wasn't too overshadowed by the style!
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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5 Years Ago
thank-you so much!! i honestly wasn't expecting anyone to notice this poem so the fact that you had .. read morethank-you so much!! i honestly wasn't expecting anyone to notice this poem so the fact that you had such nice and helpful things to say about it really made my night!! this really encouraged me to try writing some more in this style-i wasn't sure if it was too abstract or just didn't work? but thank-you for your feedback!! i wrote this poem on a whim so it means a lot that it meant something to you
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