The Toxic Taste

THe TOxIc TaStE Of YOu LiPs

THe Juicy Flavor of Your Blood

My PreAsured fang On Your NecK

The Scream You make When It's In

The Temptation I get to Keep going

The Sound You make TO stop

The Toxic Taste

 

Author's Note

its a little goth I know

Reviews

[Elvina CZq]

The Toxic Taste.. I love the title, very creative, sensual in a way. Nicely written, keep on writing :)

[JenLyn]

Dark and erotic, love it! Good write! Keep it up! :)

[Mitch*Dandy]

Nice and dark... Different written too... I like the fact that it's short but gives more emotion than you expected.

[Lanky]

This is quite interesting, I like the darkness of the piece. I also was at first taken aback by your use of capitol letters but once i adjusted to it I found that it made your poem flow even more. It conveyed the idea of toxic quite well. In fact, I normally dont like poems that involve fangs sinking into someone neck (I get tired of reading about vampires) but i really enjoyed this! Keep it up

[PaperHearts]

Wow, very dark and intense! I liked the shortness and sharpness of your lines, and I thought that it worked really effectively in creating the tone of your poem. The whole 'toxic taste' concept was really creative, and I thought that you executed it well! Nice work,
~PaperHearts