Possiblity

Random poem...not sure where this came from

Can’t run

For the enemy is inside

Nattering at me all day long

Not matter what I do

I can’t run

 

Can’t hide

They will find me

The unwanted ones

I fear them more than life

I can’t hide

 

Can’t cry

So much has happened

I was just left alone

Like a diseased rat

Now I can’t look back

And I can’t cry

 

Only camp

The one place I can go

Where I feel normal

My friends are there

People who finally like me

Only at camp

 

Been followed

Every attack was watched

Only 3 cared

2 were the attackers

The other was unknowing

While I was being followed

 

Kept

Finally a guardian who cares

About my welfare and

Where I live or die

Finally a loving sibling

Being kept

 

Possibility

Maybe I can move on

Step out of the ashes

Walk on after it all

Just face the future

There is always that possibility

Author's Note

This was a poem I wrote from the prospective one of my best friends characters as part of a book. I like the dramaticness of it...what do you think?

Reviews

[R J Askew]

I really like the word 'nattering'. I have not heard that for a long time. Northern English? Like me. Yes, there is drama in your poem. I esp like the last line.

I confess and this might not be a great thing to read. But I cld not help but think about the Norway saga as I read. The poem cld almost be the voice of a survivor.

The enemies inside cld be survivor guilt.

[zero binty]

Feeling trapped sometimes opens your eyes to your true possibilities. Loving this piece, especially for the last stanza which shows hope through all of the troubles. With your head up, you see a lot more. Just keep looking for the next step.

[khalid]

great work. i like the sequence of the events in it
also, the words were nicely picked..
the images look to be sincere
great work really

[Blue Chantilly]

I think its really really good and you're right. It is dramatic

[Cassie Fraga]

lots of conviction in this piece and I appreciate the depth... very nice penning my friend!!

[RosaliaSky]

This is one of the best poems you have written. It is like running from a bad situation and then finding a new family who loves you. It also sounds a bit like a phoenix at the end, when you are talking about stepping out of the ashes. I LOVE IT!