Can you bring me the Moon? Part: 1

A pair of KILLERS. A pair of TARGETS.

Two cloaked figures ran across the rooftops of Viera, silently drifting, careful to be unseen; unnoticed. They launched themselves off the rooftops, like cats flying, landing steadily without noise, and continued springing from roof to roof towards their destination. 

The glint of the moon faintly shined upon the two, and their shadows could almost be seen. And as the cool breeze of the night moved along their invisible sleeves, the night moved.

The two reached the walls of the castle, and slipped along above it, jumping from tower to tower. As they reached the part of the wall, both brought out  machetes from their sleeves, then hid them once more. The two looked at each other for a moment, silently communicating to each other, before separating. One went towards the room of the Count's daughter, while his partner went towards the room of The Captain.As he reached the door of the young Lady, he slipped out his blade once more and opened the door. 

The large window in the middle of the room was open, and silver light spilled into the dark room. The Counts daughter, was on her bed, leaning out the window, looking up at the moon. He took a step forward, ready to pop open the vial that would fill the room with the odorless gas, to start his kill.

The girl turned her face around to look at him, with her bright eyes, behind her long lashes.      " Hey." The assassin froze with his blade in one hand, and the vial in the other. " Can you bring me the moon?"

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So far so good, albeit little information. Strong description, intriguing dialogue. Too little perhaps for me to give any considerable review. So, instead grammatically I noticed;

"The Captain.As he" should be(add in a space), "The Captain. As he"
"brought out machetes" can be simplified to, "drew machetes"
"towards" can be simplified to, "toward"
"The girl turned her face around to look at him, with her bright eyes, behind her long lashes" could be simplified to, "The girl turned. Her bright eyes, framed by her long lashes, held his gaze."

Anyway, will give the next part a read soon. Hope to see you around here, thanks,
Josh.

[SirPen]

m'kay thx for taking the time to give me considerable amount of grammar corrections to Consider, if should be changed or not.

[Jo Winter]

Also Counts daughter should be Count's daughter.

I like the following:
"They say, they can fix my legs...that I can be healthy and strong
Because it seemed to me as if she knew why the man was there.

I will review the rest on the next pages as I have to post before I hit 'next' or what I have typed disappears.