Dancing Life

The wisdom of the dance.

As the rising waves of crashing sound

Cascaded over me and all around

I was swept up off the familiar ground

I learnt then to ride the waves

I learnt to dance

I learnt to release the falsities to which I was bound

And embrace the thrilling sound

In motion lies meaning

Everything moves continuously

A vibration of waves always oscillating

Nothing is ever stagnant or unchanging

I can stand on the floor and try to be still

And be battered by the music and the dancers

Until the sound is mere confusion lacking all thrill

But I can also move

I can stand in the shallows and try to stand firm

And be crushed to the ground and almost drowned

Until the sea is a terrible thing that only makes me squirm

But I can also move

We can seek a state of safety and comfort

And build brick houses with brick walls

We can work until our bank accounts are brimming

And... dig ourselves into a rut

But we can also seek a state of growth and life

And build wooden houses that let the sun in when it's rife

We can play with our worlds and let ourselves move

And... we can get into the groove

Reviews

[Revery]

This is absolutely lovely. In depth and meaning it is excellent and speaks to deeper understandings of life and love. This speaks so much to me right now. Thank you for sharing. I do have a little bit of a critique, but not because I am anywhere as good as you, but because this poem approaches something so perfect that I give my opinion, which I acknowledge is only my opinion. With each successive stanza not counting the "But I can also move" the wording seems to get a little simple or not quite fitting. For instance "only makes me squirm doesn't work, don't know if its a rhyme and meter issue or a metaphor issue. I read it without it and it almost doesn't seem needed.

In the fifth stanza, "We can work until our bank accounts are brimming
And... dig ourselves into a rut" this almost seems thrown in here and seems too much. I think you might want to consider taking that out as well.

I am by no means as good a poet as you but there are my opinions if would like.

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Lovely

[Rosallia]

I am awestruck right now. Quite honestly, I rarely find poetry on this site that is truly well written, vivid, and that really speak to me. From the very first stanza I felt pulled in; your words come alive. I am very, very impressed. Fantastic job!

[Jed Sabffle]

this painted such great images in my mind.
very wonderful.
This poem is filled with rich words.
It brings the truth about life.
well-crafted poem :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this poetry. You started with the ocean and went to music and dancing. You had my attention.
"We can work until our bank accounts are brimming
And... dig ourselves into a rut"
A nice ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Meaningful and crafted to perfection, a well palced piece, good read.

[Dayran]

A gesture that points at possibilities quite the opposite of what we experience at a certain time. Its realization lies in giving up the mortage, a separation from the family, finding a vacant beach and letting the grass grow under our feet. But as an alternative, it refers to possibilities for a greater growth of our mind and our involvement in the world. A peek today, a house with broken tiles tomorrow. Nice write!

[Aella.lives]

This is uplifting and just all around awesome. I loved the repetition of "But I can also move" and the last line, "And... we can get into the groove" was just great. Excellent write.

[Priscilla Sayers]

Nicely done. The consistency of change. I love the way you used the ocean, the way you showed that standing still is not a plausible option if you are to survive. Move, we all must. Dance, we all can....

[TawnyBlueStar]

hi,
wow! this is amazing :D
Makes me actually want to start dancing around XD
Really like the flow and it feels like when I read it, there's a beat.
music within a poem :)

[MandaBear]

This is absolutely lovely.