Song of the Susurrus

An ode to the melody that is nature.

A glimmering gurgle

Of a morning songbird

A shimmering warble

Of a mournful owl

The feathery rustling

Of wind in the foliage

The leathery scuffling

Of little feet on a pebbled path

I'm learning to listen

To the subtle song of the susurrus

My eyes begin to glisten

As I immerse myself in the whispering

Of nature's spirits

To hear their sacred teachings

One must only listen

Listen to the ethereal melody

Of the world obscured

By the discordant thoughts

Of a fearful mind

Then does the song of the susurrus

Begin to reveal its' intricate perfection

Then does the song of the susurrus

Begin to deal its' infinite affection

Reviews

[Sunny]

OOH I love this! It's simple and lovely! I love how you highlighted certain words to bring it a new life. I absolutely love this!

[Ellener Peavyhouse]

Excellent! Silence of the mind is so hard to obtain and equally difficult is setting aside the ego of the discordant mind so that one can truly see the truth of the world that is actually around us. I loved the way you slowly drew us to that point~ Nice job~

[Poetic Beauty]

Silencing the mind and being a part of the universe allowing it to speak to us is a difficult task. This is a beautiful way to get that point across to the reader. This is vivid and well thought out.

[Revery]

Very sweet, this poem takes us there. Very well written.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Love the poem and your choice of colors is fantastic. I would have to say the color choice for the word subtle is most definitely "subtle" Bravo!

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

really nice wording!

and the colors are a fine touch
:)

[The They]

Wow i love this poem. It reminds me of a poem i'm reading now. Humans produce their own rhythm which tries to escape from nature (as if that was even possible). Only when we silence this impulse can we connect with the fundamental reality outside the illusion of our own isolation as "above nature". Great job

[tk]

a brilliant piece! ^_^ you've managed to capture your reader with your imagery. the flow is great, and the use of rightful adjectives to describe things is just..perfect! i totally liked this... ♥
:)

[NZane]

I love how you used the colors :) Beautiful work ^^

[Amila Jay]

Beautiful:)