Love or Lust

my current situation! enjoy

 

She ignites the flame in my heart

A feeling lost when we’re apart.

Is our love strong enough to trust?

Or could it just be lust?

 

You took my ticket, you were the one

I called it love

You called it fun

You’ve done it before, it was nothing new

Could this be the reason I love you?

 

Not my girl, but not my friend

No beginning, middle, or end

No consistency, no person always there

And when I need you, no time to spare

 

Don’t get me wrong, there’s good times too

Kissing and hugging as all couples do

But, is our love strong enough to trust?

Or could it just be lust?

 

Author's Note

just banged this out in a half hour. need feedback! second poem!

Reviews

[Rose of Gondor]

Sorta sad. It's that point in a relationship when you wonder, is this really love? Sorta bittersweet, and again, boiling with raw emotion.

[Missy Moooooo]

This poem is touching, it's very good. I could kind of feel your emotions.

[D1218]

The speed of the writing does show a bit, but it also makes it seem more... real at some parts - like a teenager furiously writing something after a situation that brought all their doubts to the surface.

[emmajoy]

This has great wording in places - it's a topic that could be debated in various forms, especially these days when life's one mad rush. However, the speed of the writing does show here and there where the meter's off. Do you read your work aloud, notice where you naturally pause?

Thanks for asking me to review, plus wanting my honesty. Hopefully what's put here is helpful. Best of luck, you've reams of potential.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I loved this poem. Teenagers in love is just puppy love. They don't know what real love is until they truly do fall in love. I believe as well that everyone wants to be needed. I hate when teenagers lust after each other. Thanks for sharing. :)

[J. J. Nightingale]

Every-one wants to be needed, thought of, touched .. And we want to be held outside of LUST , and be above all, LOVED .. ..

I hear a young heart beating ..
And a young heart in Love ...

Well expressed .. Jazz

[Lily Mae]

I'm not sure what the answer will be for you but you did a great job penning the emotions..x

[Prophecy]

it's a pleasant exploration of the said theme, I find it highly readable.

[Molly Leanne Jasmer]

wow this was really good! Great rhyming. keep writing(:

[K.S.]

Well written and feelings well expressed. Will agree that people can easily relate to this poem - especially liked the second stanza. Keep up the good work-