Love or Lust

my current situation! enjoy

 

She ignites the flame in my heart

A feeling lost when we’re apart.

Is our love strong enough to trust?

Or could it just be lust?

 

You took my ticket, you were the one

I called it love

You called it fun

You’ve done it before, it was nothing new

Could this be the reason I love you?

 

Not my girl, but not my friend

No beginning, middle, or end

No consistency, no person always there

And when I need you, no time to spare

 

Don’t get me wrong, there’s good times too

Kissing and hugging as all couples do

But, is our love strong enough to trust?

Or could it just be lust?

 

Author's Note

just banged this out in a half hour. need feedback! second poem!

Reviews

[† Allybear!!! &d..]

This is interesting. I been battling with this problem all week. Excellent job.

[Ang]

You can really taste the emotions. I really liked this!

[Destiny]

aww such sad emotions. Makes me feel like I wanna give you a hug. Nice flow.

[Tai Ryens]

The flow is ruined a little with your wording around the middle of the poem, other than that, it's a really nice poem.
The concept is something that all couples think about now and then, and it makes it quite confusing to think about sometimes.
However, I do tend to believe that it switches between love and lust quite often, and the thing about it, I also believe love can't exist without lust. Everyone lusts for someone else at some point in their relationships, but it could switch back to love in time.
Very good write, keep it up!

[Hotwater]

That's not bad at all for only a "2nd" poem, good idea the love and lust thingy... and I like the repeated lines in the 1st and last stanzas.
*bird*

[Thea]

Love has a big difference from lust...Just happens that it's hard to identify...A good poem...I find it somewhat sad but I enjoyed reading it.

[Jb]

I really like this, it's got a good rythm to it and applies to something that alot of us can relate to. Great job!

[i-love-you-boo♥]

This is really good and i love how it can be so relate able to many people awesome writing =)

[tkersh]

Nice writing. Good exploration of an emotional topic. The "is our love strong enough to trust/or could it just be lust" is 8 syl, then 6, which brings us up short every time. Try something like 8/9: "is our love strong enough to trust/is it love or could it just be lust?" This also works if you do: "No constant, no one always there/And when I need you, no time to spare", which is also 8/9. Just a good way to bring the beats together and make a good poem stronger. Keep it up!

[Desiree S.]

I really liked this poem, but its pretty sad. Its that time when your in love but have confusion.