Love or Lust

my current situation! enjoy

 

She ignites the flame in my heart

A feeling lost when we’re apart.

Is our love strong enough to trust?

Or could it just be lust?

 

You took my ticket, you were the one

I called it love

You called it fun

You’ve done it before, it was nothing new

Could this be the reason I love you?

 

Not my girl, but not my friend

No beginning, middle, or end

No consistency, no person always there

And when I need you, no time to spare

 

Don’t get me wrong, there’s good times too

Kissing and hugging as all couples do

But, is our love strong enough to trust?

Or could it just be lust?

 

Author's Note

just banged this out in a half hour. need feedback! second poem!

Reviews

[marybeth davis]

i love this! great rhyme you should keep up the great work!

[Brianna W.]

I love this! This is really amazing. I can feel exactly what you are trying to say and it makes me want more! I really appreciate this poem and I understand how you are someone with a lot of emotions bottled up inside, because I am the same way. This is great don't stop writing ever!

[Empirik]

Hey, your thoughts are there, it is cyclical and it sounds exactly like something a seventeen year old would go thru. I know I did. You wrote with a clear voice. You can not ask for much more than that. As you can see many people were touched by it. I like the mystery, and it is pretty obvious how you feel. My advice is keep it close to your heart (as it seems) and always work on vocabulary. Good Job!

[Allan Eddings]

Bravo! I do not think I could have managed this in a day let alone half an hour! I am always impressed by rhyming schemes because none of my own work employs it - I have no sense for it alas.

Back to the matter at hand. A lovely poem, conveys its message with poise and with a sense of urgency...it almost begs the reader to answer its question, lust or love? I like that. I like poems that engage actively with their reader, I mean after all a poet shouldn't create a new feeling I believe but rather reach into the soul of humanity and show us what we all feel. What can I say I am a hopeless Romantic.

In any event amazing work and two poems is not enough I simply must read more!

Thank you,
A.E.

[McKenna B.]

amazing!! :) Like I said before, it has a rythm to it that makes me think of a song...great job!

[Lady Of The Wolves]

I love how this poem flowed and rhymed! The topic was very well written! Great job!

[Tate Morgan]

Very well done beginning to end It tells the tale and does it well

[2n2me]

I think u have tapped into the minds of many, it's very thought provoking...

[aloha.]

there's a thin line between love and lust. especially if you're not mature about the two topics. anyway, this is really good! i can really relate to this.

[Kyrosutra]

Right on man :) I always like to read about Love or Love Lost... Always so full of such powerful emotion and everyone is able to realte on some level... Proper Good Job man :D