Which is worse? Thinking alone and sad forever or drowning?

Curves and lines become my only thought,
blank,                                .                              O0 .       . 
uncertain,
distraught.
I open too wide,                                                              O   o   . .
so I suddenly close.
If I've said too much,
they must be disposed.                                                                                   .
Say goodbye,                      O
when you cling.                                    . 
Cut off the music,                                                                                             o
when you start to sing.                                         .        .
Say hello,
to forget the pain,
but know eventually,        .
pain comes back again.                                          o    .
Watch the joy wash away,
like waves in the ocean do.                                                        O  o 
Thrown to the fish,
with chains tied to legs.                                                 o      .       .
Falling through,
the deep dark blue.
Sitting and thinking,                                .                                                           .
alone you soon know,                                                                                                                     with darkness like this,                                                                o                                               there's no place to go.

Author's Note

The O, o , and . are a picture. Sideways the words are shaped like waves and the dots represent bubbles. So outside of the water an ocean still exist.

I've been told it makes people think of a clock.

Reviews

[Porter]

Ah...very cool graphic you have going on there. I didn't see it at first, but that adds a cool effect. I am glad I stumbled upon this piece of writing, too. Your figurative writing works well with the rhymes, and I love the meter you established. I love the part where you begin to compare it to the waves and being thrown in the ocean. Simple, yet moving. The only thing I would change is the very last line. I feel, myself, the conclusion is the most powerful part of a poem, and leaves the reader feeling something. You do an amazing job leading up to the conclusion throughout the whole poem, but I feel you just decided to use that because 'noon' rhymed with 'soon.' I think if you thought a bit harder you can come up with something more meaningful. It doesn't even have to rhyme, as the concluding sentence is your final thought. Just my suggestion, take it or leave it. Amazing write. ~Never Forget

[Fornever Always]

Thank you! That's good advice. I'll do just that.
I'll also e sure to check out your work.

[Porter]

Ahh that is so much better. Perfect. :]

[JackValor86]

wow... well that was depressing, love the graphic, it added to the feel of what I was reading, by the way I think drowning is worse.

[Jack Kennedy]

Wow so imagination and creative! Great poem as well! Thanks for sharing