Up in flames

Drench me in gasoline, and set me aflame.

Watch the flames devour my body.

Overcome the heat, deny all shame.

Screaming loudly; my skin becomes all shoddi.

You think I'm dying, soon to become just a pile of ash;

you see me stagger, you see me stand.

Now hear me clash.

 

Puncture the fuel lines.

Walking down main street; hear the villagers scream.

As I walk forth, they all disperse.

Gas fills the air; as I make my way- buildings start to ignite.

Leaving only me in sight.

 

 

Burning bright, my pilot is my soul to lite.

The mortal in me fades, the immortal takes hold.

Strengthening me to a greater potential;

I still stand as I am not a man on fire.

Though now I am a man of fire.

Author's Note

I plan on developing this more. This is just a rough idea of what I am thinking... already shows for potential.

Reviews

[The White Wolf]

I think this held its meaning well through the whole piece. There was an underlying tone of "I want to be on fire" and I like that, it is very cathartic. I honestly think you could leave it as it is and it would be powerful. I also think you could work with it further and it could spread even further into different avenues. Overall, interesting and well thought out.

[MandaBear]

"I want to be on fire" and I like that