Our love will save us

Written about my girlfriend and I. I'd really like some feedback on this please, not the best but I'm tired

 Her eyes meet mine

A gorgeous mixture of blue, green and grey  

but she looks away and I think I know why

If she doesn't I may see the sadness in her eyes so they betray her

Her smile tells me that all is fine and well and the smile will stay but her eyes speak quite the contrary.

Between the cold winter mornings and the crying fits at night it's stuck there

As if wearing a mask and behind it she's crying

lying to the world around her and it fools some but not me

not me because I can tell a real smile from a lie because I can see it in her eyes but I'm the only one who can see

But she pretends I don't know so I play along for a while

But the act gets tiring and I must speak what's on my mind because what's on my mind is her

Although my thoughts are in a blur and they don't make a lot of sense I speak up

"Are you okay, beautiful?" 

I know the answer shall be a lie but I try because I must

I get an answer so old it's rust she says 

"I'm fine"

A dreaded two word sentence because it's an easier way of saying "I'm not okay"

"I'm tired, I'm sad and I'm broken" and I'm sorry I don't do enough to save you

because I know it feels like you're drowning

but you can swim if you try I promise

as the tide creeps up on us 

we will keep each other afloat because there's no need for anyone else and we'll decline the offer of a boat because our love will save us. 

But at the same time, our love could kill us.

 

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

You have a unique style and form about you...This was sooo good...Thank you for penning...:)................

[generic twat]

Thank you so much c:

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)...............