Old Man 2

Walking cool and slow to his back as he sits;

I softly and lightly touch his exposed flesh.

He's been dancing nude in the den, again,

Windows open and he cares not at all.

His eyes close at my touch but I know

He's not finished for the night yet.

Who will reach first? He places a bet.

I giggle like he loves and he laughs in return.

We duck between what to place or to let burn.

He is in perfect form, this is his game and he is set

I fumble along looking a little amateurish but no regret.

Reviews

[Costa Siwale]

This piece wonderfully captures a moment of unrestrained intimacy between two lovers. It has a sensuality to it

'I giggle like he loves and he laughs in return
We lie between the sheets to place and we burn'

I sense a feeling of safety and boldness in their shared experience.
Well written my friend!

[ETERNITY]

Spot on! my friend! "To place" our wagers upon each other's prowess "and we burn" in our desire for each other. It's a fantasy, yes, but fun to weave! Thanks for reviewing, Costa Siwale.

[Thomas W Case]

Powerful writing. Great work.

[ETERNITY]

Thomas W Case Thank you so much!

[Vol]

Eternity,
Any guy who does not like it when she goes softly and lightly after he's been dancing in the den, needs to find better music... maybe something like a sweet violin, "Go ahead now! Grab your partner and rosin up that bow!" two to one odds, it's you!
Yee Haw!

[Vol]

Of all the things you've said to me, this is the weirdest...

[ETERNITY]

@Vol, like I explained to RedZone, sometimes I'm not steering exactly right. Sorry.

[Vol]

Eternity,
Any guy who does not like it when she goes softly and lightly after he's been dancing in the den, needs to find better music... maybe something like a sweet violin, "Go ahead now! Grab your partner and rosin up that bow!" and two to one odds
Yee Haw!

[redzone]

I think this 'old man' should teach you this 'game' of 'dancing in the den'; stepping together and fumbles are turned into new adventures and the only regret is that it is time to get up. And we think, "do we have to? Can't we stay like this all day?" Hope you have an 'old man' like this Eternity.
-Curt

[redzone]

While it is good to know your life online is fantasy, safer that way. Besides, poems are art, and not necessarily biographical. They reflect views and opinions, imagination and far too many read and think they are stories about the author, instead of ideas about how things can be or hope they would be. My commne tis more to the ideas you presented in your poem and not an opinion on your life. Having said this, I was wrong to make it more personal in that last sentence.

[ETERNITY]

My tendencies somewhat veer into the unnecessary. It seems I'm not the only one steering, lol.