For Melissa

Just 4 contest

 

Playing in the dirt

in your beautiful lace dress

so proud of the mud pie

you made for me

Reviews

[Christine]

LOL This too is great!! I totally can see Melissa covered in mud, proudly presenting you that mud pie!!! How many times did we see this very incident happen!!! LOL Great job, but I think that it could be a bit longer...I know you did it for a contest but, how about expanding it a little more. Melissa is more than a hiku thingy...LOL There is way more depth to her than just a few lines. :-) I'd really like to read something about her...poem or short story. Just a suggestion. LOL now I am actually thinking about writing something about my Sarah :-) LOL Wow, look at the inspiration you caused just with a couple of lines. :-)
Love ya,
:-)