Life is Bitter Sweet.

Dying for love

My life was going fine

Until the day she left

Now my life's in shambles

for weeks I've hardly slept

 

I keep replaying the scene

over and over in my mind

I hear her voice, see her face

"I don't love you" cut's me every time

 

She said we grew apart

I guess that much is trtrue

Cause the more I fell in love with her

The more and more she withdrew

 

Death is so much easier

Then dealing with her memory

Every day my soul she'll haunt

Destroying every part of me

 

As I climb the companion way

To my own demise

Her incense fills my nostrils

My coffin is in her eyes

 

I'm sitting on the edge

Watching the cars go by

Wondering how I got here

Wondering why I'm still alive

 

What's making me hold on

Is it something deep inside

Telling me to forget the pain

or am I afraid to die?

 

I finally gather up the nerve

and stagger to my feet

I feel the wind caress my face

close my eyes in self-defeat

 

I take my final breath

My foot just over the leech

The last words I whisper

"Love is bitter sweet"

Author's Note

This one makes me sad.

Reviews

[Lyndsay Castro]

Well this one makes ME sad too! But it's a wonderful piece and I think it beautifully demonstrates how powerful love is. I think you could make a few tweaks here and there to make it flow better. But the imagery is beautiful and you stirred some very deep emotions in me. Good job on a poem well written and well recieved! Even though it's sad, such great writing is exactly what I needed at this point in my day.

[Christine]

Damn! Sad...down right depressed.

Write a happy one soon, will ya? LOL

Love ya,
Christine

[Donald Cole]

making you sad is understandable. like standing on the edge. although character has already made the decision. All of the feelings in this poem are so well illustrated by the words.
always,
Don