Cold Flame

A word list poem

Cold,

So cold.

Flames fill the night,

Yet I am so cold.

 

Sound of emergency

Screaming in the distance

Eager to end inferno,

As I wait in the cold

 

Remembering without regret.

State of shock?

Perhaps…

Cold as ice,

 

Knowing matches

Ended abuse.

Burning home

That held no warmth

Opinions denied

Unjustified

By anger so cold..

 

Heroes rush to save him,

But too late

Life taken

Ending in ashes

Setting me free,

 

Yet I am so cold.

 

Reviews

[OT]

ooo this has a clinical feel almost - it's cold kind of - relaying it - I had the image of someone sitting there, blanket wrapped around, maybe cigarette in hand, tears just with that cold glassine stare - retelling it all as if it wasn't happening to them though it was! the clipped lines give it that feel too - "knowing matches... ended abuse" - together and separately read!! nice!

[Tommy]

Frigidly expressed; it is a chilling thought, thinking of our house burning down from all around us, leaving us out in the elements....This a reality for so many...

Great Write Gloria!
RLG,
Tommy

[HB]

oh, I like this. Nice book-ending.

[Rossen]

Chilly look back, killer write left me blowing smoke!

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

The cold touch of Death, consuming the soul. Dark poetry my friend, Great poem

[Patches I'm not so new..]

Oh this is good Reminds me of a lot of things seen in movies and read in books but this is an original take on an oftrepeated scene. It has something a je' nais sa quoi that sets it apart from "run-of-the mill" poem and/or stories in this vein.
A very vivid picture has been created here one that any reader can unserstand like Dante's Inferno this becomes very real in the mind.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

This wonderful piece gave me shivers