Prisoner

OTina

The TV plays and I just sit and stare

In plaster prison I am left alone.

They said the night that took my limbs was long,

But I survived, unwilling yet to die.

 

Before that night I thought I’d never die;

I didn’t have the time to sit and stare,

Too busy having fun to be alone,

Surrounded by my friends….but not for long.

 

Now bound by wheels, my days and nights are long,

Conflicted by the drive to live or die…

The choice too hard, I simply sit and stare

Immobilized, depressed, in pain…alone.

 

Perhaps Prozac or Valium alone

Could give me back the will at least to long

For better days…let go of need to die,

And then upon a brighter day I’d stare..

 

Instead, I sit alone and wait to die…

Just sit and stare and pray it won’t be long.

Author's Note

This is my attempt at the challenge Ostensible Truth presented, The OTina. I tried! ;)
This is NOT autobiographical! ;)

Reviews

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

Great try at OT's little form! I bet he's pleased with this, you did a great job! Such a nice, clear and blunt dissection of every day life for a lot of people.

[MuSe Ampoule]

Oh wow Gloria! Great work with the OTina form...OT must be proud! While I read this I thought of your son and wondered if perhaps there was more of a story behind this. It reminded me of the poor young soldiers returning home damaged in all ways even if not physical. Breaks the heart! This was well expressed here with lots of really great lines. You made us not realize there was a form at all for the strength of the content. Marvelous Job!

[Tommy]

Ah Ha! And you answer in such great poetic fashion! Gloria this is great! It flows so well, and the repetition is never noticed, which is the grand goal with this style. The story tells so smooth, one never gets lost in it; just a fantastic write!

Awesome Gloria!
RLG,
Tommy

[Robin]

another great O'Tina , nice work G !

[OT]

oh wow! this is brilliant - you two have royally put me to shame ha I need to do my own little thing really hey! haha the pain expressed in this is powerful - also I was worried that the shorter form would end up with all the words too close together but you've both shown it works quite nicely! I'll get cracking on mine ha - this was great - you chose your words perfectly - I also like and am intrigued at how the tones of both of the attempts have been quite monologue-ish - hmm a trait perhaps - it makes the repetition easier maybe!! interesting!! bravo!! very impressed!!