Silence

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Silence

 

Silence surrounds her,

Deafening silence.

   No sound of a car, no garage door opening,

   No little girl’s voice shattering silence,

With gleeful gab of school day fun,

   No performance of Hannah Montana songs,

Simply stillness, deafening silence.

She sits, watching sand slide through the hour glass,

     Hypnotized,

          Mesmerized,

               Lost in thoughts of global pain.

 

He was the Mars to her Venus,

She was a mother’s blessed fulfillment,

          Gone.

   Forever gone, taken by calamity,

   Leaving her hypnotized,

          paralyzed,

               Immobilized

                   The only motion a single salty tear

                         Sliding into the silence.

 

               

 

Reviews

[Lilly Negoi]

one bite from this and i felt goosebumps all over. the way you repeat "hypnotized, mesmerized" and then "hypnotized, paralyzed, immobilized" is of such a strength, emphasizing brilliantly the enormous sorrow felt. and that "single salty tear" seems so small compared to the huge pain it is bound to carry out of her soul!...

[OT]

oh the melancholy and woe of this piece - I'm sure I've read it - not sure why I never commented!! it explores the depths of solitude and internal grief - "forever gone"... "paralysed" etc. - very well penned as always!! I hear that silence! it disturbs!!

[Nothing Personal]

Oh this is disturbingly good. It is terrifying to think if someone is really into the shoes of that situation..Your lines have evoked it perfectly..making us crawl and sink away from bitter truths like this..It's dark and very touching at the same time..Great poem..

[KAREN]

Wow! You can feel the pain! The poem is solid!
Love the last lines as well.

[Tate Morgan]

A wonderful way to experience anothers thoughts is to watch them contemplate their own existence and hope against pain that they have learned

[Kerry O'Connor]

This is the kind of silence which screams in the mind, leading to madness, and one I hope never to experience. Your control of mood in this poem is superb.

[Art Sun]

this is a sad one G...to feel this pain is to have lived life and held the very life of another within their grasp...we feel that loneliness and silence within a meditative state to only find ourselves....to live some more

sad...and so very well written...