Crystal Tear

Thought I'd try 'stream of consciousness' and this is the outcome.

 

Crystal tear

Prism reflecting despair

Whose ugly shadow

Casts its net of nothingness,

Too tightly woven

For anguished heart’s escape...

Choking humanity

Into oblivion…

‘Til anger thrusts its red cloak

Over desolation

Crushing it to fine slivers

Forged into sharp savage sword

Ripping through the

Curtain of darkness.

Black blank emptiness

Replaced by color of blood.

 

 

Author's Note

I haven't done stream of consciousness writing before so I'm not sure if this is correct but am posting anyway.

Reviews

[OT]

haha EH - some streams fall of cliffs! so true in the metaphysical and real sense!! this however does not!! and yeah what is an SOC? - who knows, I bet no one could tell you - it's just a flow of thoughts! which this is - pure words from pure thought - a nice little dark shade to it and some great imagery to boot = brilliant!!

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

This is brilliant and very nicely constructed. The flow throughout, with the emotions and thoughts portrayed very thoroughly without allowing them to take over. It tells the progression in a fantastic manner. =D

[Robin]

streams are streams , there is no right or wrong, its your heart pouring out words into that pool of consideration for us to drink from ~ I second that booya

[E.H. Monroe]

SOme strems follow off the cliff, this hangs on. This is dark, almost inducing fear.
The red cloak transformed into a sword ripping into the darkness, like blood is greater than the dark ultimately answering the age old debate of who would win in a fight..anger or fear.
Hey I guess anger wins..

booya