A Needle in the Carpet

Betwixt, Betwined, Beneath the tweed

lay the nasty pin,

It pierced my toe without a need,

My foot had lost again.

Of all the places I should step, 
I landed on this pain,

"Walkin' on pins and needles"

Just doesn't mean the same.

I merely stepped up to the lamp,

to read my daily news,

When all at once - the pin,it stuck;

submerged up through my shoe,

And yelling out obscenities

I screamed these words in pain,

"Either I get shoes with thicker soles,

Or ne'er read news again!" 

Author's Note

This was a poem written about any random subject to be written in fifteen minutes or less. It was revised over the years.

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Marí 🌾

I can honestly say that I've never read a more exemplary fifteen minute poem, and to begin it with such catchy alliteration takes both skill and boldness to successfully pull it off, as brilliantly as you have here.
Having experienced spearing my foot through its boot sole with a board gripped rusty nail, and once enjoying the thrill of a toothpick hidden in carpet impaling 'twixt a big 'n second toe, I can truly attest to the goose bumps your poem has gifted a tender memory … and, I hope this piece is but a creative fancy.
Excellently rendered poeting, Lady-Poet, with lines that dance, flow, and rhyme ever-so rhythmically across and down the page.

Thank you for the neat treat! ⁓ Richard 🍀

[Mari' Emeraude]

Aww, thank you for taking the time, ;p

[Stella Armour]

oh yes, i know just what it's like having stepped on a drawing pin that went throught the sole of my slipper ... it's the sudden pain that makes you shout obscenities, really sharp , much worse than pins and needles ..

[Mari' Emeraude]

ooo just thinking of this hurts!!

[emmajoygreen]

Have been known to rick my back bending down to the carpet to find that glint I noticed seconds ago but seems to have gone! By that time, news is the last thing am interested in, cos not only is my back hurting but there is blood on the carpet! One gets moments like that - yes?! See how your pain has inspired a reminder to buy some clogs!

You have always brought a smile to my lips and inspiration to my pen! Hope life is being kind to you. Happy New Everything, Mari!

[Mari' Emeraude]

Thanks again for the lovely comments. Hope your New Year is treating you well. Watch where you're steppin' 🤭

[John the Baptist]

Worse things could happen than never reading the news again. Cutting down on it has improved my outlook greatly.

[Mari' Emeraude]

Good point!

[John Sullivan]

Lovely piece. Had a chuckle.

[Mari' Emeraude]

Thanks, John :)

[Crowley]

Clever and painful at the same time! Conjuring up a sharp image of those things that we never foresee, but exact a toll,, especially if we never get to red the new again! Great write especially for a fifteen minute prompt!

[Mari' Emeraude]

Thank you, Crowley. In all fairness, I did change one or two words, but the shell of the poem remained the same. It reminded me of when Mac Davis used to get prompts from his audience and make up songs on the spot. He was so good at that! Does anybody even remember him anymore? haha!!