Your smile overshadows your desire to cry
but I see the sadness beneath those eyes
your soul needs a place to hide and disguise
the true feelings you harbor within you
Why are you so sad tonight?
words come still, yet so contrite
don't speak at all - you've got that right
that's not been taken from you
Can you express how you feel about me?
probably not, that's not reality
don’t know that I would want to see
that I didn't know the right way to love you
You matter to me more than words can say
but for now I'm just stayin' out of your way
‘til you approach me on your own one day
I’ll be ready with these arms to hold you
lethal romance, love & emotions with ur moist feelings be well stirred with the contemplation of words, i must say. really liked da way how humorously have u cummed up with suchness of write. absolutely gorgeous, of course, as you already are.
The beautiful thing about the way this poem is written is that it leaves room enough to conceive of the first person addressing self. Though what is more, it details the sensitivity - with subtleties of mists - of tenuous though gripping threads connecting all intimate relationship.
I found this poem as affecting as Toni Childs' own deep voice.
Poignant words. You write for many of us who have been in that place. I had it first time round with my daughter and again with her eldest son whom I have raised. The good news is that eventually they come back. It's all part of growing up. Many is the time I have kept silent for fear of saying the wrong thing, and that hurts. Sometimes you do have to love from a distance. My grandson of 24 is moving back home in a couple of weeks with his girlfriend, to join his two siblings and my husband and myself. Five years ago, I thought that an impossibility. Your poem is eloquent, flows and rhymes well. A class act.
Chris
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Chris, surely you meant to say your son, not grandson? You look too young to have a grandchild of 24.. read moreChris, surely you meant to say your son, not grandson? You look too young to have a grandchild of 24!
I had my daughter at 20 and my grandson arrived when I was 43. Those grandchildren of 24,19 and 17 k.. read moreI had my daughter at 20 and my grandson arrived when I was 43. Those grandchildren of 24,19 and 17 keep me young :))
6 Years Ago
Well it seems to be working. You look fabulous!
6 Years Ago
I'm happy, that makes a huge difference and thank you.
Mari - watching our children grow, not just getting older, but away from us can be bitterly painful. We must trust that the love and affection we have given over years of trial and tribulation will be remembered and rewarded. I suggest to you a poem I wrote some time ago that is posted here. "Children" at the time I wrote it I was teaching, working another job and doing graduate work. I got to wondering and it was the result.
sometimes that all we can do, stay out of the way.... but never shy away from letting them know how you feel.... it's an honest, open poem Mari', perhaps they should read it... thanks for opening your heart and sharing...
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Thank you. Yes, I just stood on the sidelines waiting to welcome my child back in.
So beautifully rendered, Mari' 🌸
Yet, sooo very sincerely sad and soul-touching within the depths of my core … you've stripped my emotion bare and touched the tenderest corners of my heart, and your own heart speaks in a poetic voice I've longed to hear.
You're a poetess I highly respect, enjoy, and admire -- the more of You I read.
With warmest feelings, I thank you, Mari' ⁓ Richard
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
What a kind complement! Thanks so much.
6 Years Ago
Kind compliment?
I was speaking with sincerity … you are certainly welcome, Mari'.