A Fractional Melody

My rendition of what has been done thousands of times before

he was painted as a blind man who

kept to himself, when one day he

opened his eyes and was able to

visually admire the world’s subtle clockwork.

 

from watching paint dry and grass grow and

admiring leaves falling off trees and the faces

people made when they were about to laugh, he

absorbed all the bliss and talked with a smile.

 

his eyes then saw hatred and how gloomy humans

could get, as they tormented him with fallacies and

melted with misery never fathoming  such

a jagged perception of life.

 

perplexed and quiet, he closed his eyes again to  

avoid shaking hands with the broken society. Until he

met her and she gave him a cookie made with flour and

love and then the world did not look so hopeless again.

 

 

Author's Note

Please tell me your thoughts

Reviews

[Rana]

Such simple words yet quite intriguing. It was interesting to observe how you showed the changes from indifference to bliss to hatred then finally to love and hope. Specially loved the ending, it was beautiful. Also, the imagery in the second stanza. Overall, this was quite a happy poem.

[Gaston Villanueva]

Thanks Rana! Your analysis is much appreciated!

[Ovi-Odiete]

You are such an amazing Poet and Writer.

[Gaston Villanueva]

This means a lot to me
Thank you!

[W R Stowe]

A simple act of kindness is what can turn someones life around as I portrayed in "Another Day" I am animate about walking ones talk because the way we act and live becomes our testimony

[Gaston Villanueva]

I agree entirely and I'll check out "Another Day" when I can!
Thanks for stopping by!

[W R Stowe]

you're welcome

[Samuel Dickens]

This is delightful, and I had to smile at the end. I guess that cookie worked for me, too.

[Gaston Villanueva]

I'm glad you liked it
Thanks Samuel!

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

love .....the most powerful gift of all! Either it makes you blind or makes you see....there is nothing greater!
He is a man that knows the world....a man that has self :)

[Gaston Villanueva]

What a great interpretation and I agree completely
Thanks :)

[Woody]

yes!! good idea. if this is what the world looks like, I'm perfectly happy with my blindness.
then the last stanza restores hope in Human kind.
nice. very nice.

[Gaston Villanueva]

That's exactly what I was trying to convey
Thanks for reading Woody!