Scissors beats Paper

my first submission to Writers Cafe

They say Death was left-handed and never sober.

They say Life had a garden and loved to paint.

Rumor has it they met in middle school but went their separate ways after an argument over Them.

The argument was about who would get Them longer and after many years of bickering, they came to an agreement.

Ro-Sham-Bo with the utter-most consequences.

The winner got to entertain Them with parties and aimless adventures. To interact with them for a lifetime.

The other got Them the rest of the time but couldn't feel joy anymore.

Scissors beats paper.

So the victor had a backyard with a monstrous pool and seven shades of grass where They chased wind all day and all night.

The other gargled time away and waited, mainly playing games of Solitaire.

They say when it's time, Death plants Them in Life's garden and waves 'em goodbye with a drunken left hand.

Life sullenly welcomes 'em in and cries as he watches Them paint a new life.

Author's Note

I appreciate any thoughts you might have!

Reviews

[Chadvonswan]

Scissors beats paper. This was an epic poetic tale of the physical philosophy behind life. It deserves a TreeTime Award. For your first write, you have accomplished what it is to be a poet who doesn't rhyme. I like how short this was, yet still conveying a gripping theme. One thing I would suggest editing is changing "Them" to "They" in the second to last stanza. It would flow better. But Nice Write!

[Gaston Villanueva]

Thanks for the support Max!

[Chadvonswan]

You should enter it in this contest: http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/The-Larcenist-Volume-II%2C-Issue-1-poetry-contest/50919/

[Mute Ventriloquist]

Haha very interesting Gaston. VERY interesting.

[Gaston Villanueva]

Thanks David! You better believe it!

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

That was very ethereal and philosophical.

[Gaston Villanueva]

Thanks for reading!

[VandanaO'Connor]

This is just great personification of life and death, and I really just like the idea of Death being drunk.

As other reviews have said, you did accomplish what many poets struggle with-- the absence of a rhyme scheme.

[Gaston Villanueva]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!

[Me]

I would agree with Chadvonswan's suggestion to change "Them" to "They", because "They" is what you start the poem with also. A good poem. Creative writing in good form with this one. Nice.

[Gaston Villanueva]

Thanks for the comment Me!
I agree with what you guys said