This Pen

This pen has a universe trapped within it

there are suns and moons, planets filled with life,

and barren rocks floating in space.

It wants to write to the music of the spheres,

but the author is a buffoon.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh i love this....love the concept....the personification of the pen that can't see eye to eye with the author...and the brevity makes this say so much in few words...our poetic circumstance can certainly be a flood, or barren rocks...one just as well as the other.

j.

[garrshaw]

yes it can, thanks Jacob

[wordman]

the poets pen is a sword,it can cut deep

[Ed Hart]

oh, i know, i know; it is a curse...come be my friend

[garrshaw]

I haven't been here in over a year. Thanks for the invite, Ed.

[Master K-tops]

This is wonderful. The figuratives are so brilliant and memorable. This is a classic example of short and awesome. And I don't think you're a buffoon at all :D

[garrshaw]

haha... Maybe I'm not but the evidence is overwhelming :). Thanks for your encouraging words Master K

[Jamestown]

So clever this piece is, made to make us writer's laao!
Enjoyed this read for sure,thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[garrshaw]

I'm happy you enjoyed it Jamestown. Laao... that's something new

[Sami Khalil]

A magical pen from a talented poet...Thank you for sharing...:)...............

[garrshaw]

Thank you Sami for reading.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. ......:)......

[Marie]

That's the way for many of us. We can never write to the heights we feel. Though Jacob does a pretty good job.

[garrshaw]

Yes he does. I have found a number of very fine poets on here that blow-me-away!

[Relic]

~ I can see the novice writer penning his note and sending it into the ethos where no answers can be found or returned. The complex melodies of writing, understanding and life may be too far over his head. ....Just a dull interpretation. ~

[garrshaw]

You say dull, I say wonderful. tomato-tomato. I love the way you saw it Relic.

[Gee]

Oh to be the buffoon that is you.....sweeeeeet!

[garrshaw]

haha... thanks Gee

[charlie]

(Let the buffoon dance, inspite of himself)

Write on, shaw

[garrshaw]

Thankyou Charlie. Great comment.