Blind To Love

My first ever attempt at a sonnet about a guy who had no idea I had a crush on him

My time with him has been but a shadow

Of what my heart truly longs for with him.

Without him I am left dim and hollow;

Nothing but a shell so bitter and grim.

Can’t he see the hurt I cannot swallow?

The love I would have burst from every limb

Denied by his ignorance; his shallow

Field of vision blind to the pain I’m in.

Yet I cannot fold, I have to wallow

Alone waiting for our life to begin

Together only at his command though

I think the chance of him seeing is thin.

Do I continue waiting in the dark?

Or reveal and feel the might of his bark?

Reviews

[Courtney]

I like the ambiguous nature of this poem.. And your uncertainty is as clear as your love for this man.

And if this is still a situation going on in your life-- or ever again in the future-- I say go for it :) Waiting and wondering is worse than being turned down any day!

Thanks so much for posting, I really enjoyed this poem :)

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Awesome job:))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))

[Antoñyo]

Interesting read...For me, this speaks so accurately of young heartfelt love as it needs little to no reason to soar above the clouds...somewhat fearful but care-free of the fall.

Thanks for sharing

[The Silent Deviant]

I enjoyed reading this. It's an interesting take on something that is easy to relate with, and it shows individuality. I'm particularly a fan of the way in which it ends off. I like a conclusion that leads the reader to think.

[justjenn_2u]

Some people can FEEL and some don't know what passed them by. I have been both those types of people and this is a good look back on those factors. I love the pure honesty and the willingness to pen hurt. Way to go

[Pranav Malhotra]

i thinks its a neat writeup

[paleshadeofwhite]

Lovely enjoyed reading it you write very well :)

[Forgotten]

It's tough to reveal feelings to someone who you have no idea feels the same way back, this sonnet portrayed it clearly and really carried over the emotions one would feel in such a situation. Great job

[A. Amos]

Nice job very neatly done, congrats

[Gaelan_Hamilton]

Thanks, I tried to follow iambic pentameter in the old Shakespearean sonnet form to keep it as tidy as possible, which I actually found really challenging! Really happy with the result tho :)

[A. Amos]

You welcome I will download some of my work, hope you to see review and advise accordingly

[Gaelan_Hamilton]

Sure thing! :)

[A. Amos]

thank you really wish huge success in life

[Saddam]

Ah. Very nice poetry on shadow. Wow, dear lovely poetry is this. Loveya.

[Sami Khalil]

Pen on....A very good one...:)......................