Love Note

i love you in that space between moments where you laugh at silly things and i am overwhelmed with what your happiness means to me. you laugh and show me what you laughed at and it is invariably stupid, i tell you so, and we laugh together blissfully at nothing. it's not quite a moment, but a space between the breaths of time; you are breathtakingly beautiful, and I am without a doubt your's, ball and chained by the freckled, curly haired boy who needs to eat more, and loves me most in the smallest ways.

Author's Note

inconsistent and incorrect grammar; this piece is particularly short and it has been driving me insane because i love it, so constructive crit would be wildly appreciated.

Reviews

[AliceBarnes]

This is seriously just so cute! I saw it and I just had to read it, it really pulled me in. As you said you would like a constructive comment, you could do with more capital letters "I" instead of i, as it just makes the whole piece look a lot better. But other than that, to me, it seems really good. Short but sweet, and I really like that about it.