Soulless Surrender

Soulless Surrender

From far above I watch them.
What’s going on?
Did I cause this mayhem?
Are they crying because I’m gone?

I thought they didn’t care.
I hear my mother whisper:
“Please tell me this is just a nightmare.”
Next to her I see my sister.

She’s trying to hold it in.
She’s trying to be strong.
But everything’s resurfacing from within.
Was I wrong?

My dad holds each of them close.
What have I done?
I was the one that got the choice.
I held the gun.

I pulled the trigger.
Ending my suffering.
I thought things would get better.
But now their hearts are aching.

I mattered.
I had love.
And now everything’s been shattered.
I’m stuck watching their pain from above.

I was blind.
I didn’t see.
What I left behind.
She whispers,”Please baby come back to me”

I want to come back.
But I’m stuck in this darkroom.
All they have now is a big crack.
All they have now is a soulless tomb.

An empty room.
Full of memories.
As the pain starts to consume.
Taking with it small victories.

I’ve caused to much pain.
From life, and now through death
There’s no strength I can regain.
I’ve taken my last breath.

There’s nothing more I can do.
To stop the only thing they’ll remember
This memory will breakthrough.
My soulless surrender.

Reviews

[Wyrn Tiger]

Dark and dying. vary beautiful

[Lovecraft]

Beautifully dark and very well-written. Suicide and an apparently trapped spirit. The beginning and ending are good.

Overall, you captured a certain mood very well.

[Farrah]

I liked it very much , you showed as if you really had the experience ! real fun and inspiring to read!

[613]

So dark, so eery; a different perspective of a suicide - the aftermath of the victim looking down on their loved ones lives, feeling remorse for taking himself/herself away from their world. I truly enjoyed this. Fantastic work. I look forward to reading more from you in the future.

- Brittney