Autumn Sestina

My first try at a Sestina, and I must say this was so much fun to write. Uninspired Writers October Challenge.

Once again brings the autumn
the last of the harvest's golden
rows, dried from September's missing rain.
The Indian summer succumbs to the cold
and the earth is swaddled in an overcast blanket
as late afternoon bleeds into the dark.

It was as the light gave way to dark,
in the crisp, sharp freedom of autumn's
breath that you wrapped me in your blanket
of flannel and denim. Your icy eyes and golden
hair distracted me long enough from the cold
for you to shepherd me out of the rain

and sleet. But as this celestial rain
spilled endlessly forth from the dark
October night, I grew progressively cold.
My own shadow dimmed the lightness of autumn
and the last of the sunshine and its golden
gift. Blackness covered me like your blanket.

It was within that foggy blanket
that I lost my mind. Not even the healing rain
could cure me until I met the golden
savior who rescued me from the dark.
Gone were the barren and wasted autumns.
Here, my hands felt less cold.

My eyes and lips, too, forgot the cold,
for they had been warmed by your flannel blanket.
My eyes opened and my lips smiled at autumn;
my eyes smiled and my lips opened to welcome the rain.
It is true I still fear the fog and the dark
but what should happen if your golden

radiance does not find me? Will the golden
mornings leave me paralyzed in the cold
or will the midnights lose me in the dark?
Will the blackness return? And will it blanket
me in nothingness? I pray for a healing rain
so that I will not lose another autumn.

I will learn to hold on to the golden autumn
as the cold holds on to November rain,
ready to cover the earth in dark, foggy blankets.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem dear Poet.
"I will learn to hold on to the golden autumn
as the cold holds on to November rain,
ready to cover the earth in dark, foggy blankets."
We do learn to accept the changes. When we learn. Life is seasons. We have gain wisdom. I liked your description. Create good visions and left the reader with something to think about. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Harmony Lee]

As someone who typically does not choose favorites with such things as art and poetry, I am nonetheless compelled to claim that this piece is among the most wonderful for me to have ever read. I was inspired to read aloud and record my own voice as I navigated the cadence of this great writing. It is simultaneously simple and complex in its beauty. Perhaps the use of lightness and darkness alongside such words as "golden" would become overdone if they were not so delicately articulated in repetition and juxtaposition. I like the vocabulary choices throughout, and especially the lines "my eyes opened and my lips smiled" // "my eyes smiled and my lips opened". Wow -- great work, would love to read more of yours. Thank you.

[Centfie]

A very beautiful and fun to read sestina

[Jordan Smith]

This is a wonderful Poem! I loved the imagery and the emotion put behind this one. Wonderful Job with this one gabiaimee, keep up the great work! :)

[wordman]

you painted a lovely image of autumn and love !